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I'll Never Forget You

by faithlessfate


Fighting for the time
Makin' up your mind
changin' your direction
it's so hard to keep in line

From my point of view
it's so hard to be untrue
can't you see me grieving
because I so love you

But now that's not true anymore
The words, the music, you know the score
can't tell where I'm coming from
you know that you're the One
don't know what's up or down
everything's coming around for me
but I'll never forget you

Walking down the street
I can hear the beat
of your footsteps on the sidewalk
why can't you see it?
I know what I want with you - can't ya feel it?
I know that what I feel is right

Now I'm fighting for cover
want to be your lover
I'm feeling the heat
I can't stand no other but you

you are my life
with every stab of the knife
you drive the pain deeper
why can't you be my wife, I used to say

But now that's not true anymore
the words, the music you know the score
can't tell where I'm coming from
you know that you're the One
don't know what's up or down
everything's comin' around for me
but I'll never forget you

some days I just wanna love you
but I know
all I can do is think of you
whoa oh oh oh

But now that's not true anymore
the words, the music, you know the score
can't tell where I'm coming from
you know that you're the One
don't know what's up or down

You know that you're the One

don't know what's up or down

You know that you're the One.........

and I'll never forget you.


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Tue Feb 24, 2009 12:12 am
thedelphinater says...



This was good. The rhyming fluctuates, which makes it a little confusing, so I'd work on that a little. The rhythm was good, and I couldn't find any little nit-picky things. Anyway, good job!





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