This was good. The rhyming fluctuates, which makes it a little confusing, so I'd work on that a little. The rhythm was good, and I couldn't find any little nit-picky things. Anyway, good job!
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Fighting for the time
Makin' up your mind
changin' your direction
it's so hard to keep in line
From my point of view
it's so hard to be untrue
can't you see me grieving
because I so love you
But now that's not true anymore
The words, the music, you know the score
can't tell where I'm coming from
you know that you're the One
don't know what's up or down
everything's coming around for me
but I'll never forget you
Walking down the street
I can hear the beat
of your footsteps on the sidewalk
why can't you see it?
I know what I want with you - can't ya feel it?
I know that what I feel is right
Now I'm fighting for cover
want to be your lover
I'm feeling the heat
I can't stand no other but you
you are my life
with every stab of the knife
you drive the pain deeper
why can't you be my wife, I used to say
But now that's not true anymore
the words, the music you know the score
can't tell where I'm coming from
you know that you're the One
don't know what's up or down
everything's comin' around for me
but I'll never forget you
some days I just wanna love you
but I know
all I can do is think of you
whoa oh oh oh
But now that's not true anymore
the words, the music, you know the score
can't tell where I'm coming from
you know that you're the One
don't know what's up or down
You know that you're the One
don't know what's up or down
You know that you're the One.........
and I'll never forget you.
This was good. The rhyming fluctuates, which makes it a little confusing, so I'd work on that a little. The rhythm was good, and I couldn't find any little nit-picky things. Anyway, good job!
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