What goes through her mind,
when she escapes into the shadows,
of this dark alley?
Evil wraps its arm around her.
It leads her into sin,
horror,
and doubt.
When she sees the dark shadows,
why doesn’t she stop?
Why does she choose,
to dive headfirst into the shadows,
even though she knows it will break her neck?
Who is this girl I used to know?
What happened to the girl,
who sat quietly in the corner,
and smiled at everyone who passed by?
She asks,
"what is it I do wrong?"
I think it is obvious.
You have turned your back on everything.
Me,
your parents…
Even your own Savior.
You cause shedding of tears.
Soon,
I am afraid I will no longer have tears to shed.
"why?" I ask myself.
why?
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Cool! Thanks for the advice! does anyone else have any advice?
Nice. I may no have completely got everything but I'm not a poet. So stuff me. I'd just tidy up and maybe break up the paragraph.