Hello evamxck! Welcome to YWS! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul.
With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overallStrikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.
My interpretation:
This is about the younger people conspiring about the elders, huh?
Overall:
I did like the poem. However, there are many grammatical errors and I doubt that you know what some words mean and are spelled like. Also, the first line doesn't make sense. However, this is a first draft on YWS, and your first work at that, so this is very good especially for a first-timer on here. Keep up the great work!
Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --
Kara
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