Published February 15, 2007
hey this is just a repost of it i just fixed the errors could not find anything else wrong with it.
My life is like an ocean; at the peak of a storm. At first, it was as if everything was going wrong. The waves of my life were crashing around; ready to wipe out what ever was in my way. Like I was mad and wanted more than anything to just get rid of my life, but then it all changed.
It was like the storm was starting to calm down; everything just started to fit into place. I started to fit into place; I started to believe in myself; I knew the reason for my life. I finally knew who I was, and that I did not have to fit in with all of the bad groups and the gangs. I could hang out with people who really cared. People may not know who I am, but I do. My name is Alissa Jewel Lawson, AJ for short. I'm out to make a difference; show what I can be after what I was or what I used to be. I'll show them; I can promise that.
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I really liked this, it made me want to keep on reading. I was just thinking that maybe you could add a small description about what a storm in it's peak is like, you give a small example with the waves but there tends to be more with a storm. But then (to contradict myself sorry
) it might bog the prologue down. I like how this is short and sweet, straight to the point. It's really good. 