Dear Santa,
Every year, a kid looks forward to December 25th--Christmas. And why? Because they're given gifts, of course. I bet that all of us--maybe even you--has heard of that cliche scene of an excited little kid running down the stairs to check that big ol' Christmas tree. I know I've done that for many Christmases.
This year, I've given up hope. As I said before, I run down the stairs, dive under the tree, and eagerly look for some awesome present--and I find socks. For three years in a row now, I've found Fruit of the Loom among the branches. So my question to you is this: if a kid doesn't get a good present, what's the point of Christmas?
I've asked for action figures, Pokemon cards, everything. And what do I get? Socks. Ever since 2012, it's been socks. Can you please give me something less... I don't know, lame? I'm gonna try again, one last time, this year. I'm gonna hope for the best. And if I find socks one more time, I'll sue you. Believe me, it works. Even in the North Pole.
Sincerely,
Sock Boy
P.S. DEATH TO SOCKS!
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Hi erilea! This is Lily, and I’m here to review your work.
I liked how you say that you will sue Santa. It adds humor to the story.
However, I personally think that you shouldn’t use the year in your story. I think so because if you state the year, then people who read it automatically know what year and when you wrote this. Dating the work makes it look like it has been a long time, but actually it hasn’t.
Overall, I think it is very funny and silly. I enjoyed reading the letter. ✉️ Have a great day!
Lily 🐺
Hello, Artemis! Elysium here with a review.
So, yes I see the humor and the satire in there but I'm not really feeling it. This is okay, but it's bland. There isn't a lot of detail. Let's start.
Yes, your Dear Santa part gives it away, but I think that if you paraphrase this sentence, it would add the lacked detail. Also, you stated "a kid." Instead I would put "nearly every child in the world."
I will also state that the character that is writing the letter seems greedy, ungrateful. I don't know really of you were trying tk achieve that, but I won't go into the cliche "true meaning of Christmas" speech.
Yes, this does say 2012 and since when, but I would instead say,
See? I think it sounds a lot better
Anyways, this could use some polishing up. It isn't the best but it isn't the worst. There is always room for improvement and please don't get discouraged by this review. Thank you.
-Elysium
This was supposed to be in little kid style, when all he thinks about is presents. But yeah.
Hahah, this was funny. Truth be told, I expected something mediocre when I read the title. But you surprised me. That has to be funny for the parents when they read his 'Note To Santa' and find out that their gifts suck.
I myself, I really hate getting clothes. Not for immature reasons, I've just always hated clothes. Your relatives will never know your tastes and they will buy the most ridiculous articles of clothing for you. Socks are okay, but even then, a relative will always get you the wrong shape/thickness of sock. At least, that has always been the case for me.
This hasn't happened to me yet, but I thought it'd be fun.
Heheh, it's fun to read and you did a good job xD
Thanks!
Pshhhhhhhhhhh, I ask for socks every year. Not even kidding, I'm just a dork.
Hi there!
Basia77201 here. This is funny. I also find it funny how little kids hate getting clothes, and as we get older, for girls at least, we hope to get some nice clothes. (I know I do!) Funny how we change. I love this letter, and its really a nice breath of fresh air from all the gloomy said poems and short stories. Ironic I say that because I write stuff like that. If you don't mind, I would like to put this in my writer's notebook.
Nice. I like the fun tone this letter has- it's not serious at all, but in a good way. It's actually very adorable and relatable because we've all been there, haven't we? And I imagine several kids have written this exact same letter to Santa.
I will say it's a little early in the year for stuff like this still (Halloween stories!) but its okay
Nice. I like the fun tone this letter has- it's not serious at all, but in a good way. It's actually very adorable and relatable because we've all been there, haven't we? And I imagine several kids have written this exact same letter to Santa.
I will say it's a little early in the year for stuff like this still (Halloween stories!) but its okay
Haha! I just love the light, humorous feel of this letter. Great job!
Hahahaha, I found this piece actually pretty funny and very relatable. I found the writing ok, but a little childish. The piece itself is good and many will like it because of being able to relate or because nostalgia. I believe that you could turn this even in to a good short story. Anyways it is good work keep it up
It was meant to be childish, because "Sock Boy" is young, about seven to eight years old. But thanks!
I can relate to this! I hope for a cool new video game, but instead, clothes. I especially like how you signed the letter "sock boy" and said "death to socks!" in all caps. You write nicely and I think we've all found "Fruit of the loom" among the branches. Nice job, I do like satirical things like this! Death to socks, life to video games.
Haha, thanks for the comment!