Think of this...
If your life was a flower, would it bloom?
Would it rise and fall with the seasons?
Or, possibly would it wilt with the bearing load of sorrow?
Think of this...
If the love of the world was given to you to carry on your shoulder would it weigh much?
Would the love cause you a great deal of struggle?
Or,possibly, could it be that the love would help you to carry it and hold it's own when you were weak?
Think of this.
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Hey Emoticon, Chupatoasta here!(:
Wow... I think this was great. Short, but great!(: It really tells a lot in a couple stanzas. Other than a few, small errors here and there, it was really, really good and I enjoyed it greatly.
You may want to add a coma here (The coma that I put in bold). It might make it flow a little better. Sometimes we, as readers, need a mental breath to understand what you've said and what you're going to say, so that's where comas would come in handy.(:
This seems to me like a few, commonly made errors.
1) You forgot a space after your coma and before possibly, no worries though
2) You might not want to captilize possibly, as it isn't the beginning of a sentence, nor a proper noun
3) You might have been typing this up a little fast and misspelled possibly, but no worries, just butt out that extra L.
4) Again, with own, you spelled it onw, so you might have been typing a little to fast and not noticed it.
Other than those few, commonly made errors, this was great!(: