Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Four years ago all my emotions died along with my parents. My life was perfect -some may say- I had friends and family. The day my parents passed, I was put in an orphanage. I have no other living relatives. That same day my best friend told everyone my biggest secret, that I'm gay, and then proceeded to give me a knuckle sandwich. The day my parents passed I made my first cut -there are now hundreds. The day my parents passed my life started its downward spiral, and my voice was not heard from again.
Well, that's quite a prologue there, for something that's as small as this one, it does manage to pack quite a punch and what looks to be a terrible story all into there very well here. It definitely lets you know right away that this is a story where a lot of pretty bad things take place here.
The death of this person's parents is repeatedly mentioned and while usually I'd say that's a bit too much repetition I think you've done it here to really nail home the point that this was the moment where this entire downward spiral began and I do think this emphasis really does help convey how much it affected this person which means in this case the repetition is good.
The mention of the best friend is also quite interesting, you can tell that is a pretty big deal there...but the way that's it just mentioned only once there...as a sort of add on to the devastation of losing this person's parents puts in perspective just how horrible the deaths were and also shows this was truly the worst day of this person's life here.
All in all, we have a pretty powerful picture built up here in the start, and well, I'd say this a pretty solid prologue here, it seems like a story that I would read at any rate.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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