Hello! I hope you're having a lovely day or night or whatever time it may be for you! Quill here for a short review!
First impressions
Wow, I didn't expect a poem about art to be so emotional! But boy, was that good! I've never seen art described so well before! Some of my absolute favored lined are
wow, I don't think non artist/writers understand what a connection you feel to the things you create. But you describe it perfectly![/quote]The ink stains on my hands feel like blood
Shed from all the lives I’ve created
So just like Sisyphus and his task
I write until I could forget
there is so much to say about this line but something that really jumps out at me right now and has to do with the way the artist can be so connected to their work. It's like a truth, an emotion inside you that has to come out, and I find that really interesting!
this line was powerful I don't even know what to say. This is a hard, deep feeling that I think a lot of people feel but the thing about artist and writers is that the way we express through art it makes it so much more like there is so much you didn't do. I don't think this sentence makes any sense and I didn't say it quite right but oh well. Really great line!To the lives I couldn’t live
The promises I couldn’t keep,
The sacrifice I couldn’t give
minor suggestions
So there's really not much to say because this was crafted so well! I only have one thought and this is entirely option based:
I usually don't like too many stanza dividers but I think this piece could really benefit from it because this is a little bit longer of a piece(well, more midsized but anyway) and I think that having a break in text would be more inviting and could add more flow to add emotional pause In your work. But like I said it is completely creative choice and you don't have to listen to me at all!
conclusions!
I really enjoyed reading this piece! I loved the way you got so much emotion across in this piece. It really makes me think about art in a completely different way. Thank you so much for writing this poem!
Keep writing!
~Quill
Points: 1642
Reviews: 54
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