Hi there, here for a quick review!
Overall Language and Meaning
The language, rhyming, and repetition of this poem gives it a marvelous flow - it was quite catching and I think you could almost sing it. I felt a bit like I was missing some sort of background information - what flag is this exactly? A country a sexuality a business a political party a personal emblem? I couldn't tell and that really made it difficult to place understanding in this poem.
Interpretation
I interpreted the poem to mostly be a reflection on difference between people and feelings through the use of these color and flag metaphors as the speaker goes through this journey of life - the good times and sullen and hellish times, and the times led by light of the moon or other life events.
Cohesion
I think you could keep your imagery a little bit more in one category - they were broadly nature - but then there was a lot about sight and travel too and it didn't always seem to be connecting. Try to follow what your poem is saying sentence by sentence, or even draw it out - I think you'll find it's a tad hard to follow as a complete thought.
Good luck in editing! And never stop writing!
~alliyah
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