"The end of the world is nigh!
It's all so sudden, we don't know why...."
The t.v. screens shout out,
making everyone scream and shout.
I stand here listening and watching.
An observer in the mist; watching the people, the world in their reaction.
The panicking, the worry, the running and yelling.
It's all so troubling, so why even bother?
I sit here in the cafe, noticeably it's empty.
I look back out on the streets watching the people run and scurry.
I take another sip of my coffee, throw my jacket over the shoulder,
and head outside, the great wind blows across making it colder.
The road in front of me unravels and breaks.
The buildings shatter and oh the noise that it makes.
It's coming nearer to me; I stand in the middle.
Watching the end, straight in the eye.
No expression built on my face,
just waiting, watching, waiting....
It's all a hassle to think way to hard,
too deep, dark, depressing.
Just go on with life,
It was an honor to be here at all.
But the time has come,
and I accept it all. too. well.
Bye.
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Hi there! I really enjoyed your poem, because you did a good job of finding ryhmes that fit the theme. I am terrible at this sort of thing. So bravo! My only real criticism was the ending.
Your punctuation with the periods doesn't make the statement anymore powerful. It just makes it choppy. If you want to put emphasis on those words, I would just italicise them. And the Bye, seems awfully informal after a poem full of formality. I personally would delete it. Good job!
Really nice...
but its really good...
YOu've got talent like most people (if not all)
that get on this website....
Keep up the good work..
i have no real critiscim (idk how to spell it)
because im still learning in that part..ha..