Raspberry Kisses

AWWEE!
ITS SOOO CUTE!

This is amazing, I'm literally in love with this poem. The realization in the end kinda stuns me to be completely honest. Now i wouldn't exactly say fighting does that all the time. But your right it could be 100% true.

Now to the baddddd parts! I'm just teasing the only thing i see is you forgot a coma! But its no bigi.

(If we do(,) I’ll walk out the door*

I hope to read more!!
Anma

Hello! This is a cool poem. I am a dumb human, and not very good with poem analysis perfectly, (yes, I'm young and dumb, yay), so I wish I understood this a bit better. I however, did like this poem just for the way it made me feel. I usually read poems not for what they mean, but for the emotions they give you. This gave me emotions of melancholy, love, even a twinge of passion... it's kind of a sad poem. Raspberry kisses... what a great way to describe it. Light and soft, tickling, sweet. You fight, and then you make up, and again raspberry kisses. What I don't get is the last four lines. I wish I did, because that would tie it together for me. Overall, though, I think this a good poem. I wish there was a bit more rhythm to it. You know how a limerick has that sway to it as you read the lines? This poem doesn't have that. There isn't much rhythm because the syllables in each line are different amounts. That's not something you have to change, because if you do it might compromise your poem. Just something I took note of.

Hello @ebaker, I'm here to review this poem,

I am a simple person; when I see a poem tagged as "Romantic", I simply have to read it. This is a good poem, that's for sure. I find it difficult to give meaningful feedback when a poem is as good as this one thus I hope my feedback might be helpful in even the most remote way.

This piece is short but still sweet. The title too is quite a good one. The line spacing too that you have chosen is appropriate, I can't imagine it having less or more spacing. You have chosen your words carefully and they connect well with each other. You haven't used any "big" words thus it was simple to understand the poem without having to consult a dictionary .The message is driven home clearly. There are rhyming words in the poem like fight/bright/don't and door/more. This has made the poem musical in a way.

The only problem I found, which is not a problem as such, is that I find the line "her eyes shine so bright" to be interrupting the flow a bit. I feel like you could have a line before it that could help transition into it.

That aside, I hope to read more poems from you.
Anarki

The title is what drew me to this poem(probably because I love raspberries). Plus they have a really bright color and are juicy, although sometimes bitter. The comparison itself light up your poem and supports it a lot but I think you can strengthen it and make your poem extra powerful. As how I did mention it was bitter, you could add it in here now too near the ending because you both aren't together anymore so when you look back on those kisses they could be 'bittersweet'. I do also appreciate the simplicity of it and that it's short. "And here we go all over again/We make up and then we fight/Her eyes shine so bright". These were my favorite lines. The rhyme of fight/bright adds to the message and helps your poem flow smoothly.

The lines I thought were a bit interrupting were, "And then I realize we don't/Have to fight anymore because/" I think it may be the 'because' that is doing the most interrupting here. I think this can just be fixed with rewording, for example: "And then I suddenly realize//We don't have to fight anymore/And if we do I'll walk out the door".

Overall I thought this was simple but also sweet.