Published August 12, 2026
roams around my mind
knows its way very well
must be a really different kind
the kind that hides in a shell
walks in a straight line
crawls weirdly under the skin
comes back right on time
making my head spin
wondering where
where did you come from?
out of my very own nightmare
the monster you will become
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From what I can tell, this poem is about one's negative thoughts and feelings tormenting one's mind. I like how you describe the negativity as something that goes "under the skin" and might end up becoming a terrifying being from one's "own nightmare" if it keeps existing. It is difficult to get rid of a "monster" when the "monster" lives in your mind. This is good writing!
Great piece of writing, I feel it under my skin as I read, great use of imagery, I am still wondering though what really this monstrosity is, you say it is like something that keeps in a shell but then in a minute it is under your skin, damn!...goose bumps all over me wondering what really this is.
Generally, you have done a wonderful job, started from where I didn't expect, ended where I didn't expect and somehow still manage to keep me guessing, great work, buddy.
thank you thank youu