MEOW! Hello, friend! My name is Ellie and today I will be reviewing using my very own Black Cat Review Method! It is very similar to the incredible YWS S'more Method but I have Halloween-ified it and made it spooky! My little black cat friend, Vladimir, wants to offer his opinion on your amazing literary piece:
Mystical Witch Hat - What I See, Observe, and Interpret
This poem of yours also stood out to me. I am really impressed with all of the poetry you have posted on YWS lately. I enjoy reading it a lot. I love your organized, but raw and full of-emotion style It is unique and beautiful.
This poem really touches on childhood trauma and memories that seen hard to get rid of. I really get this sense of being trapped in your own mind, which seems like quite a terrifying thing!
These lines were so well done:
Memories of cursing, yelling, and hitting reside
as well as hiding in the closet wishing I could say goodbye.
I love how you list the different types of memories you have. the rhyme of reside and goodbye was excellent!
And this part stood out to me very strongly:
My younger self, yearning to be held
but instead smacked around and love with-held.
Just wow, the contrast between held and being smacked around is deep. Using the words held and with-held was very clever. They are the same word, but opposites. I love the symbolism of this. The yearning is a so close, yet the result is so far.
Vladimir’s Advice - Suggestions for Improvement
I would love to see more descriptions. I know this is a short poem and is mostly narrative, but often with traumatic memories people have vivid memories of specific things. I would love to see some of that. I think the contrast of going from a broad memory to a super specific detail could be very symbolic and show the deepness of this trauma. Awesome job
Jack O’Lanterns - My Favourite Parts and Praises
I am stuck inside the inner recesses of my own mind
Oooh, I love this line! Recess is normally seen as a break from school for children. In my interpretation, this really plays on being stuck in that childhood traume, which has become a space in your mind where you feel like you cannot escape. Bravo! This was beautiful!
The last lines!!
Now, an adult, but still that child;
She wonders why she can't escape the echoes of the past so wild.
These are too good to not mention Yes you are an adult, but you are still that child. I also love the use of a semicolon in this situation, it reiterates the idea that you exist and that child exists too. Beautiful.
Black Cat Cuddles - Concluding Ideas and Thoughts
So lovely to read this! Take care!
Your friend,
Ellie
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