Hey there creaturefeature! Hope all is well in your world. The title of this caught my eye in the green room so I thought I would read and review. Let's get into it!
My favorite thing about this writing is that it is powerful and impactful despite how short it is. Each line helps add to the overall mood and theme. Speaking of mood and theme, there is a clear sense of longing and introspection. The way you showcase the desire for meaning in life with imagery and detail is wonderful. I love the line
. It is relatable and helped me visualize/connect with you. You have an interesting closing line that left an impression on me and made this unforgettable.Write poetry about their couch cushions
What can we improve here? I am having a hard time picking through this to find clear issues. I suppose a suggestion would be to consider line breaks. If you experiment with line breaks, you may add emphasis to certain phrases or create a specific rhythm. You may find that adjusting lines and breaks may enhance the flow as well. This feels a bit nit-picky and not entirely necessary, but nonetheless, I find it worthwhile to point out.
Wishing you wonder and gratitude! ˚₊· ͟͟͞͞➳❥A
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