Hey guys, first time posting on here. Would appreciate your thoughts on writing style and the overall feeling towards this piece. Threw it together pretty quickly. Thanks in advance 
EDIT - Thanks for all the positive feedback 
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As I began to see the first slit of the thing mother had described to me as light, it became clear to me that the world – unobscured by the oppressing blanket of darkness – was everything, but at the same time, nothing as how I had imagined it. Temporarily blinded, I flopped to the ground and welcomed the darkness provided by my front paws, curled across my face. As my eye's adjusted to the light, my thoughts took me back to another time.
“What is it like outside of the darkness mother?”
“It is bright” replied mother in a matter of fact tone, giving nothing up, yet at the same time giving a very precise description.
“What is bright?” I communicated to my mother, hoping I might breach her wall of unending patience.
“It’s the opposite of Dark” she replied, rather tiresome of the relentless curiosity of her latest litter. Picking up on her agitated mood, I decided to push further.
“Opposite?”
“These matters are of no concern to you yet young one” mother snapped back. Sensing that only another question was coming however, mother decieded to quench her youngest male's curiousty. “You are not yet one Lunar Cycle of age, until then you are trapped in the Darkness with only the rest of your litter as company. I will tell you this however, as I know the longing for answers you desire. The world of Light is a never ending place much like that of the world we call Dark. Unlike the Dark however, the never ending void of which we call the Light, is filled with an unimaginable number of things you cannot even begin to comprehend"
“What kind of things? What’s a Lunar Cycle?”
“No more questions! You will find out soon enough”.
And with that mother briskly disengaged her mind from mine and went off into the unknown, undoubtedly enjoying whatever the world of Light had to offer.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Okay...that is an interesting little scene here...it looks like someone experiencing light for the very first time and finding it a lot stranger than most people would, it seems like we're dealing with a being that is rather accustomed to the darkness. The sort of emphasis being put around this darkness and the light is also rather interesting, cause I almost feel like we're not simply talking about literal light and dark here.
Hmm, so this does seem to support the theory that there is much more to the light and the dark here. It appears we've got a very young person here doing the questioning and the mother is simply trying to warn her child that there are something that said child should not be dealing with at such a young age. The slight aura of mystery being created here is certainly quite fun to see.
Okay...the child gets completely shut down by the mother there for enquiring further into the matter and that makes me highly suspicious as to what might be going on with that there...buut at any rate, this does all come together to make for an interesting piece here.
As far as prologues go, I think this one manages to do its job okay, and I'm interested enough to want to find out more here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Heya,
Do PM me when you post more of this, I'd be glad to read more 
As said before me, you have a gift in writing, and this seems like a very interesting story you're cooking up.
I did find a few nitpicks, but they're so little details that I'd usually leave them out. But seeing as there isn't really anything to critic, here are the few things I noticed:
"As my eye's adjusted to the light"
Should be "eyes", most probs an accident while writing fast but oh well
"“It is bright” replied mother in a matter of fact tone"
Just a comma missing here after bright. You forgot it in a few other places too, just add the comma before the closing hyphon (these things: " ", whatever they're called).
But yeah, as I said before, these things are trivial mistakes. Just didn't feel like posting a comment without any nitpicks
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I agree with aqua babe. That really was astonishing.
You should be proud with that, there aren't any nit picks. But then again, you caught me up in the flow of the prologue that it took my mind of nit picks. Infact I had to re-read it to try and get to these nit picks, but each time it was like I was stuck in it.
Very promising.
If the story itself is as good as this is then it will be amazing.
Can you please send me a PM when you put up the next part because I am very interested to hear more about it
Wow! I con honestly say that there's not really anything that I can nitpick about this. It's well written. It caught my attention in the beginning, and kept it. Job well done.