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As promised, I made it here! xD
Oh, and you asked if I did art? I do...but they won't be the best.
Well, it seems that most of things have been covered. It's very well-done and it's got my interest already.
Personally, I agree with you on the villianess. Making her unrealisticly evil adds mystery and it's just...more interesting in general.
I'm off to review scene 3!
Hey etherealember,
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It's 'hell-bent'Here as requested (and it's my pleasure, believe me
Now, first I must mention that I've never reviewed a play script before. In grammar, this I noticed:
There's no period.
And that's it.
So far, I'm intrigued. You say that she will explain how she's gained her wealth which means that she's somehow found her loophole. Intriguing. And I have no problem with her being an evil villainess, no problem at all. It fits her character, kind of like Cruella Deville, you know?
So far, I really enjoy, would you pm me for the next?
Tanya
Thanks for the review!
The answer to your question is....Both! I wrote it and acted in it. I'll fix the caps thing!
My aim wasn't to make her realistic - I wanted it to be an escape from reality, so I gave her characteristics from the extreme end of the spectrum.
Hey there Ember!
Well first off I'm confused, is this your script, or something you acted in?
It's a very good script, but a few minor things that needs fixing.
A bunch of the characters speech isn't capitalized at the beginning which is a huge pet peeve of mine, so could you just fix that?
Also the ending, it sounds a little too...evil if you will. It's a little too perfect in what a villainess would say, sound too much like it was pulled from the pages of a book. So make it a little more realistic okay?
Good luck and keep writing!