Hi there, I'm here to review your poem~
Well, it turns out I have read this before but didn't review. Why ;-;
Okay, first I'll start with the good stuff.
Ermahgerd I love the ending. Not the best out there but you... you just made me laugh with that ending. I don't know why. I'm probably a bad person. Future security. The mom cracks me up xD Well, I have a terrible sense of humor.
I somehow disagree with the first person who reviewed saying things about the italics. It is his own opinion, and I do understand where his reason lies, but for me, it's okay. Good for me because the dialogues are kind of like this flashback and italicized words really set the tone.
Good job on this poem, I think you really did well, and dialogues are the best thing about it. Your dialogues say a lot about the people in the poem and I love that.
I don't have much to say anymore because I think the other reviewers did that already, so I must conclude that this poem was satisfying to the point where I started to think about life differently. Future security. *cracks up again*
So, that's all I can say, happy writing~
Points: 104
Reviews: 77
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