Published October 27, 2006
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Hullo Darksleuth. Spacing--though not a difficulty in printed books--makes rather more difference on the forums.
It's almost impossible to read all that text bunched together. Space it out, double?
It had a dramatically bleak beginning, and I liked the use of short sentences in between to pace. I'll be back to look over it if you'll do me the favour of making it more legible. ^_^
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*moved to Historical Fiction*