A bucket of words playing, juggling in my head
They were all thrown out until something might to end
Horrified, terribly getting my pen in the case I've wanted
And here it comes, the A-B-C became unknown in a second
'Oh dear', the call of the wind already spoken
"For real?", said the mind who even itself had broken
"Alleged!, The decisive answer of frightful bullet of pen
"Avenged!", burst out by the paper to get written
I, who possessed the reality, roulettes into dust
From the line of gravity into swings of the crust
Even chromatic mood of heart who always in conscious
Disconnected from course, had now turn tedious
Like Fortunato's mishaps were in my seconds of time
That almost, but words behind never came into a rhyme
And I'm drowning in the spot where I used to sit
Losing my work, my art, my everything on it
Going back to my place of comfort into bed
Digging everything with blue pillow in my head
"Alas!" pops up, as the words began a thread
Yet the midnight's tic-toc of clock prevails instead
The sweetest rest in night, now compels with bitterness
Hands in aloofness, feet in verge of caress
Fancy land had began to create odd screenplay
Where full pack of art diverts like monster to pay
Illuminating lace of morning sun rays now tickle my eyes
And as my body relaxes, recollection refills in disguise
'Run!', blown up by myself into surprise
Until this mode of discourse will finally suffice
At last, coming right down here on my throne of appraisal
Eagerly writing the verses you may thought a journal
But this Scroll of a Writer's Life is now you would obtain and scout
Because what you have read is what really this story all about
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Heya dangerdanger! Welcome to YWS! I've popped over for a quick review, so let's get cracking!
First off, I really really like the idea behind this piece! A writer's mind is such a bizarre, and yet such a wonderful place! Your choice of words and vocabulary showcases the fact that you indeed have good taste in language, however there are a few places that could use some improvement.
For example:
OK, so I found this bit vague, unfocused and pretty confusing, actually, since I couldn't understand what it was that you were referring to after "might." Did you mean "might want to end"? I think you've missed out a word there, because it doesn't make much sense. I also agree with Mystique that the first two lines are not as powerful as some other parts of the poem, so maybe tweaking the words a bit here and there might help.
Then there's this bit:
Over here, the reader just gets mixed up since "terribly" doesn't exactly fit in with the mood. Perhaps "frantically" or some other word?
There's also:
Here, I found myself asking what had turned tedious, as you seem to have gobbled that up altogether. But it's alright; nothing a little editing can't solve! The thing with writing is that our work is never complete, and there are always changes to be made. It's like a cycle of never ending process - to be revised again and again.
Epic imagery, really.
Overall, this poem was a really great effort, just a few minor things. So keep it up! Keep writing!
Cheers,
~Pompadour
Hey!
Let me tell you that you are a VERY talented poet.... You have chosen the perfect words in each and every line, I am in awe of the way you have described the feelings.
The first line didn't have that great an impact,
"A bucket of words playing, juggling in my head
They were all thrown out until something might to end."
This sounds more like the filler lines of a story but.... after that, you delve into a whole new world altogether.
"Alleged!, The decisive answer of frightful bullet of pen
"Avenged!", burst out by the paper to get written
These would be my favourite lines, specially because "alleged" and "avenged" aren't words generally used in such a description. I love how you have shown a writer's life in a totally different perspective. These two words successfully show the strength and depth of what you are trying to say.
"Fancy land had began to create odd screenplay
Where full pack of art diverts like monster to pay"
Again, people have used all kinds of cliche phrases for dreams. "screenplay"- new and quite right. I can't tell you how these little words make your poem SO different from others!
"Eagerly writing the verses you may thought a journal"
And that is something that every writer feels, poems, stories anything are just a reflection of thoughts and ideas.
I'll say it again: AMAZING!
I have no other words for it.
Great choice of title.
I'm jealous, really
Hi dangerdanger, SubtleSanity here for a review. First of all, welcome to YWS and this certainly a very interesting and unique poem you have here! As nadeanie2 have said, your word uses are fabulous! As is your vocabulary, straying away from the overused ones. However, good as it is. I find that your rhyme in this poem is a bit forced and so is your some of your word choices. So, let's get down to it!
Something doesn't quite flow right here, the rhythm is a bit off beat. Of frightful bullet of pen? Whew, that sounds like a mouthful. Also the sentence doesn't quite make sense, I think you meant the pen had a frightening and strong personal.
The rest of the poem had similar problems with the flow of words, but that's just my personal opinion and is a very small thing so don't mind it that much.
Overall, this an enjoyable and definitely unique piece of poem to read.
-SubtleSanity
This is a very elegantly written poetic piece. I am very impressed with your vocabulary, you have expanded your word use way past dull and unexciting and have really made the reader think throughout the entire piece. You have successfully started and ended your poem with your subject and have linked them to not make your work confusing or off topic (which is brilliant). Your work has a very strong emotional component and portrays character. I found this to be a very well written poem, well done.