Now that I'm gone, please don't forget me
Don't cry for me
For I did not die
I am up in the sky
Watching over you
Is what I now do
I am in your dreams at night
Holding you tight
When you walk, I walk besides you
When you talk, I listen to you
For I did not die
I am the moon that lights up the sky
I keep you save, even when you think you are alone
I am now the oceans dome
When you look up above
I am that grey dove
Flying over you
Flying around you
When you ask why
Remember I did not die
I am in your heart
By your side
I am now your guide
For I did not die
I am up in the sky
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that is SO good! I love it! I have friends whose grandpa died, and she felt sooooooo, ummm calm? no relived after reading that!!
This is my favorite part!!!!
Keep writing, good luck and thanks for the read!
I can see this comes from the heart. Yes I agree this is a sweet poem.
The Nitpicks:
-I needs to be capitalized
-The 'E' in 'even' shouldn't be capitalized.
It's a nice poem but it can be even better. Good base but you need to develop more on the ideas. Give this poem more flesh. It was slightly too factual. We need more emotions in this. I hope you understand what I mean.
All in all it's a nice poem but it can be better.
-Mizz
Awwwww! That is so sweet. I'm sure he would be proud. This is an awesome poem.
Keep writing.
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