Hi! Hero here to review this
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Okay, I must admit... your title hooked me. I was hoping for a very beautiful comparison piece where I realize the truth, but only two parts in your poem echoed this. Don't get me wrong, I really loved it (*Liked*) but it could have been better...
Yes, 'Un-Neat' is not a word and though you might know that, you still used it Unkempt or untidy or disorganized
I would really, really prefer better comparisons. You can do it, I know you can. I know that especially because I read:
cyndaday95 wrote:you have to take care of it. Every person who comes and sticks aroundwrites a story, and every single story is a work of art.
Read this and compare it to the rest of your poem and see what makes it so good, then imitate it with the rest. I didn't get that edge piece. Maybe you need to study notebooks?:
They have pages - compare something there? "There's alot of pages"
Lines
Cover (Not to be judged?)
Take your notebook and read it Look for similarities with your life
Okay,s o this was like a zippy review and not so organized, but I hope it helped Hero out,
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