Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.
*The 25 Christmas tales of this year!! Yayyy!!! Some of these tales are based off tales I made in 2024, some are new. I will update with a new tale every day until the 25th ends! Anyway, I hope you enjoy! This story is under my folder titled “25 Christmas tales”. Gacha Club character designs are under my character forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=960 . Enjoy and Scary Creepmas!*
Tale One-A child’s smile
Flykra stared up at the infinite, glittering white void in front of her, where blurry white spots rained down. It was not the sky, but only a place of rest, an eternal winter. The only way that she could wake up was if the energy of the Christmas season had given life to her icy claws. January would not do, for it was too full of gloom. Only in December would she come alive.
So she waited in the dimension where she could sleep peacefully, where she was the only one there, where she could not move her mouth or her claws. Did it bother Flykra not to move? Yes, but at least she would wake up someday. It was just like on Christmas Eve, when a child had to wait the next morning to open presents. It wasn’t fun, but it would be worth it when it happened.
Flykra saw the sky shake a little bit and then, she felt somebody digging her out with excited fervor, bringing her into the human world. Could it be that it was finally Christmas time? Finally?
When she felt the threads of her consciousness come together, making sense of everything that was going on, she shot up from the ground and saw that there was a little human girl staring at her, bundled up in winter gear, her brown eyes wide with surprise.
Flykra rose up, for it was her time of year to shine.
“Child, fear not. I am Flykra, a winter sprite. I wake up on only the coldest days. You are?” Flykra said, smiling with her icicle teeth. She knew that her teeth were sharp, but she hoped that they wouldn’t scare the child.
The child in question just stared at her as though she could not make anything of what she was saying. Flykra began to wonder if grinning with her teeth was the wrong thing to do, if maybe she should have done a closed smile instead. After all, it wouldn’t shock the little girl as much.
“I’m Layna.” The little girl-Layna-beamed.
“Layna! That’s a lovely name! Can I show you a magic trick?” Flykra asked.
Layna nodded and so, Flykra reached deep into her arm, pulling at her insides to get the best snowflakes from within. Layna cringed in disgust, but it would be worth it when the trick was over.
Snow and ice overtook the entire backyard, the sky was a white fog. It was just like the safe place Flykra slept, except there was a child in front of her, waiting for her.
“Do you like it?”
Flykra had pulled out a chain of glittering snowflakes, a streamer of winter magic just for Layna, a bit of joy that made the little girl smile.
If only Flykra could stay with Layna a little longer, then they could play more games, then-
“Breakfast time!” A man’s voice called out.
As soon as Flykra heard his voice, she knew it was time to go. The man could have been none other than Layna’s father and Flykra could not be seen by adults. They wouldn’t understand. They’d freak out.
She left her snowflake chain for Layna to stare at, but she would be back. After all, it was Christmas.
Flykra would be there for Christmas.
Tale Two-A cold heart, a cold night
Grant bit deep into the dead baby bird. They were everywhere where he lived, he saw them dotted on the cement back when he was in elementary school. Baby birds trying to fly and failing.
He was an elf, but not an elf that anybody would love or imagine to exist. Well, except for his human friend, Parker. Parker found out last Christmas. Parker still cared about him.
Even so, his parents still didn’t want him to come back home. It was why he was sent to the Maddox All-Boys Boarding School in the first place, because they’d rather keep him in the farthest corner of their thoughts than in their own house.
It all started that one Christmas when he was seven years old…
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Grant was outside, away from the family celebration. He wanted to spend some time alone, some time away from his family. He was always somebody who liked his own company, but that one Christmas felt different. He couldn’t stop thinking about how loud it was, how much his ears rang, how much he wanted them all to shut up.
It got so bad that Grant had to step outside and look at the cloudy white sky, where the foggy sun shone. Snow fell down, gently on the ground, decorating the barren branches of trees all around him. Their branches looked just like teeth, sharpened teeth ready to bite, ready to kill, ready…ready…like his teeth. His teeth that bled his tongue. His teeth that felt more painful than the cold, but it didn’t hurt as much as his hunger. Maybe he could go back inside and have some cookies or candy canes. Maybe little peppermints.
But it was a stabbing pain inside of him, more than any treat could fix. Grant shivered from the flashing images in his mind, of a poison that was as red as bows and warm as hot chocolate, so delectable and dangerous that it’d taste better if he waited to take it, if he rewarded himself-why was he thinking those horrible things? Those violent things? They were bad thoughts. Bad thoughts! He wouldn’t get ANY presents if he thought of evil things!
He could watch the bird, that little baby bird, flying out of its nest on the high branch. Why did it try to fly? Wouldn’t it fall? Grant had to save it! He had to stop it from falling!
So, he ran towards where the bird was, as fast as he could in the sea of snow, extending out his mittens to catch the little bird-
Without thinking, he bit into it, tasting fresh, dark blood, his aching throat healed, his tears staining his freezing, raw skin. The red dots dripping from the bird were just like peppermints.
“GRANT?! What’s wrong with you?!” Dad’s voice shouted with anger and…and fear?
Grant looked up and saw his Dad at the back door, the dead baby bird still in his mouth and he felt his heart sink.
Dad’s wide eyes held only fear. He was afraid of Grant.
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Grant didn’t think that his parents wanted to help him. Not one bit. They wanted him away and away he was.
He didn’t speak much. His voice had grown all raspy and distorted, a voice that no one wanted to hear from an adolescent. Parker was nice to him. Parker celebrated Christmas with him.
But at the end of the day, he still didn’t know why he was an elf. He had the pointy ears, but he wasn’t sweet. His soul was sour, his heart was cold, just like the dead bird in his mouth with its dried up blood.
Grant took the bird out of his mouth, staring at its broken, bruised body. His knees were on the snow, he was outside of his boarding school. He and Parker had finished caroling, everyone was supposed to be asleep. It was just him and the little brown bird. It wasn’t a cardinal, he could tell from its shape, but it was still special. It was special because it existed and he took that away from it. He took it so that he could live another day. Why was he the way he was? Why couldn’t he be human?
He buried the bird in the snow, then put a stick up as its grave. The stick would probably get blown away, but at least it was something.
With that, Grant turned back towards the boarding school. He didn’t want Parker to be too worried about him.
Tale Three-Grave mistake
Casiane studied the woman’s face, the stillness of her sleep. The woman was dead, that much she could tell, but…
Casiane did not know who she was. The woman had dark hair, just like Novalie, but her face…it was off. Different. Not her love.
She dug away the snow and buried the woman deep in it, just like she did with all of the other women that she kissed. Her heart stung from the burning frustration of it all. It had been centuries since Novalie was taken from her, centuries since Casiane had died by her favorite evergreen tree and made her spirit into a mistletoe plant. Every time a dark-haired woman went under her tree, she’d come as a twisted mistletoe woman and kiss them to take them, but every time, it was someone else. Novalie was already dead, but Casiane wanted her spirit.
When she was done burying the woman, she clenched her claws into fists, all alone in the whirling snow. Sometimes, people came to her lonely place of rest. Most of the time, the only sound was silence.
Casiane held up the blue skirts of her dress, making her way back to the tree. It was winter time again. Christmas time, she could sense it from the feeling of joy that was mixed within the snowflakes, a feeling that did not come in the other winter months. She had met Novalie at that time. They had both died at that time. Casiane could not protect her at that time.
And still, Casiane was making grave mistakes. When would the lost woman be Novalie? When would she find a spirit and not the living?
She would have cried if she were alive.
Tale Four-Clown Christmas
Fannie was put on a black couch that had deep, white holes in them, holes from it being too old, but to her, the holes looked like snow.
A year ago, clown women named Scary and Spooky had found her lost in the snow and taken her in for Christmas Eve. Ever since then, she had never stopped feeling loved and cared for.
And Fannie didn’t feel any different when she was sitting on the couch in that moment, waiting for the clowns to give her presents, presents that Santa’s elves had made for her. Spooky was getting a present, Scary was sitting with her. Scary had put her on the couch, since Fannie was a doll and could not move on her own.
The house that the clown women lived in was dark, the curtains were faded purple, orange and black. Sunlight wafted in through cracked parts of the windows, dust particles mixed with the light. The Christmas tree was dead, with only a few ornaments and string lights that didn’t work.
It wasn’t bright, but it still felt like home. It still felt like family. Fannie hadn’t felt such warmth since-
Fannie ran down the stairs, rushing to the front door. She’d have to be fast, she couldn’t keep them waiting. Most importantly, she could not keep him waiting. He would want her to be ready. If she could get to him as quick as possible, then the cold would not come. That was what they said. That…that…who were…
“Fannie?! Are you alright?! Spooky has your present now.”
Fannie blinked. That was the one thing that she could do. Scary had her claw on Fannie’s back as if she were trying to wake Fannie up. Spooky was in front of her, holding a wrapped present, her orange eyes wide with shock.
Something had happened. Fannie was remembering something, something that interrupted her moment, but what? What had blinked in her mind? Why did it disappear?
“Yes, Scary, I’m fine. You can open my present now.” Fannie said, for she could not move her hands, so the clowns would open it for her.
Scary took the present, still looking at Fannie as though she didn’t believe her. Fannie wasn’t lying, she just…she just didn’t know what happened.
Hopefully it wouldn’t happen again.
Tale Five-Heavens high
It was Christmas Day in 1950
Aize, not quite a kid, but not entirely an adult
Took his little sister, Lilia, out to get pinecones
While they were out in the snow
Their parents, Irene and Chandler
Were by the fireplace in the house
Snuggled up together and waiting for the kids
Never did they think that something would go amiss
But an awful creature with claws and teeth
Sprang up from behind and snatched them as they screeched
The kids came back to nobody home
Christmas cheer gone dry
But at least their parents
Went up to the Heavens high
After they died
Tale Six-Sad sacrifice
Yamileth watched from high up on her cloud as the woman covered the child’s mouth with her hand. The woman, the child, and her husband were far out in the woods, about to sacrifice their child to her, Yamileth.
She extended her claw out, trying to use her magic to make the parents change their mind, to get them to turn back, but still, the woman raised her knife and the child’s body fell to the snow.
Yamileth had many powers. She could create winter faeries and sprites, could make the snow rain down faster, but she could not make the cold go away. It wasn’t her job and yet somehow, people had thought that she would be able to get rid of it. Somewhere along the lines, they began to sacrifice children to her to wish the cold away and so, she would care for all the children as best as she could.
She could not change the minds of those who wielded the knife.
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Yamileth glided through the snow, towards where the child lay. Yamileth’s dimension was an infinite winter, a hidden Heaven. The child was scared, but she would help. She would try.
When she got close, she knelt down to the child’s level and said:
“They always think that killing children will make me protect them from the cold. Don’t they know it stands against my principles? I wonder where they got this idea. Hmm…no matter. What is your name, child? I’m sure you know me.”
“Yamileth?” The child asked, her brows knit in confusion as she studied Yamileth’s face.
Yamileth nodded, her claw still on the child’s shoulder. She didn’t want to grip too hard, she knew that her claws would hurt.
“I’m Oona.” The child-Oona-said.
Oona. That was a nice name. It reminded Yamileth of lambs and ribbons, flowers and starlight. A name to be written in pink cursive.
A perfect name for an abandoned girl.
“Come, Oona. I will protect you.” Yamileth said, standing up and letting go. She waited a bit for Oona to follow her, but once Oona got up, they both went off to a safe place.
Maybe one day Yamileth could stop the sacrifices. But the best thing she could do was protect their souls.
Tale Seven-Hollowed heart
Vietta hugged her arms close to her chest as she walked down the hall to her room. She had just left the bathroom and was going back to her room, but she still felt it. The shadow that was not her. It couldn’t be her, because if it was, then it wouldn’t be alive.
But still, she felt its coldness like the winter snow, reaching out towards her, threatening to engulf her, to-
She just had to walk a few more steps to her room. The glowing white light of the Christmas tree illuminated in the hallway, but it didn’t take away the sense of fear that she felt, how her chest beat rapidly, it didn’t take it away at all.
Don’t you want your sister to play with you?
Vietta stopped. The voice sounded like her own, but it was all muffled and distorted, like something from a static radio. Her older sister never had time for her, but that was because she was busy writing songs. That was what their parents said. She was going to be a musician someday and Vietta couldn’t get upset about it.
I can help you get rid of her. I am supposed to help you. I’m an angel.
Vietta felt herself being pulled farther into the darkness, far from the direction of her room. She tried to move her feet, but it was as if something were keeping her glued together, as if there were invisible ribbons holding her tight.
The pull only stopped when she was in her sister’s room, when she saw the older girl’s blond hair splayed on the pink pillow. It was supposed to be brown, but she dyed it blond to be more of a “popstar”. Her eyes were shut, she held an old teddy bear toy in her arms, both of its eyes missing.
In that moment, Vietta felt like her whole body had been stripped of its skin and only her bones were left to freeze, like she stepped out in the snow without the proper gear and then-
She saw it. Her shadow, the angel. It had wings so white that it did not look like a real color, gold so bright that it burned like fire, but most of all, it had long, glittering nails that shimmered just like her older sister’s fake nails, nails that had fun swirls and loops that reminded Vietta of her favorite toys, her favorite berry flavored lipgloss tubes she asked for as Christmas gifts, nails that were sharp enough to slice through her older sister’s skin.
The wings, with its great, overwhelming majesty, was a nightmare Vietta was cursed to see.
Tale Eight-Wrath of what is not seen
Amethyst curled her claws as she watched Irene and Chandler wave their kids off. Why was it that they got to have a good Christmas while she had to suffer in silence?
They were humans and they didn’t deserve to have all the joy that they did. What did they do but exist? There wasn’t any purpose to their lives. Amethyst, on the other hand? She created elves that would bring winter happiness, elves that would spread Christmas spirit. Without her, the elves would not exist and December would be more bleak than January.
She could not have a family of her own. She could not fall in love. Nobody could see her and once December was done, she would slip into a dimension she knew not the name of. Her only purpose was to work, but the humans…they had more.
Chandler and Irene both sat on the couch, Chandler wrapping his arm around Irene and that was when Amethyst rose up from behind the couch, snatching them both away faster than they could imagine.
Let them be in the loneliness of her snowy void. They wouldn’t like being invisible.
Tale Nine-Deep in the woods
Deep in the woods
Where the snow and the ice intertwine
D’Artganan and her spider love, Zechariah
Bring Christmas fear to one and all
Zechariah weaves his webs of snow
D’Artganan’s eyes give a sinister glow
A spider with a heart as soft as snow
An elf with a smile as bright as string lights
They don’t mean to harm
They only want a little fun
Christmas is a bore with only presents galore
Nice can’t live without Naughty
Gifts aren’t good without coal
They’d found solace in one another
What’s the harm in scaring others?
D’Artganan and Zechariah, bringing in Christmas magic and mischief
Deep in the woods
Where anyone may venture
Tale Ten-A frozen house
Something took Rhodes
Nelle knew it well
It happened one winter walk
A great force had whisked him away
Something magical
Something powerful
Something unseen
Nelle tried to tell them all
But not a soul would listen
Alone with the truth
Nelle searched for months
Her fingers grew cold
But her heart stayed warm
Doubt ate the edge of her mind
Yet determination is the strongest of its kind
Like a candle in a dark night
She searched until she slipped in the snow
Her spirit has not died
She won’t stop till her husband is by her side
And they stay by the fireplace together
Christmas is not a time to be alone
A frozen house is not a home
Tale Eleven-All is not lost
Fiore held Dionne’s hand as they walked through the void that was the woods. At least, that was what they both believed it to be. It was too dark and too late to see anything properly, except for the silhouettes of bare, skeletal trees reaching towards the husky sky with broken claws and the soft, white snow that drifted onto the ground.
It was just like that strange, surreal night he first met his daughter, Vietta, shaking in his garden and telling him that her family didn’t want her. It was just like the night he lost her, too. An angel had taken her in the poinsettia garden.
But if it were an angel, why would it take her? And why would it make him a living Pierrot clown doll? An angel was supposed to help, to guide. Even if said angel knew nothing about them and had deep, deep eye bags, like a corpse, even if the angel didn’t really smile, there was still love in the angel’s brown eyes, warmth in the angel’s hand, still-
Dionne is not an angel. He’s a human. He’s helping to be nice.
Nice was nothing more, though. Dionne did not have to help him and yet, there they were, walking to what seemed to be the ends of the Earth just for Vietta.
They got to talk about their lives with each other in the space. Dionne had people in his life who disappeared and people who died from sickness or are. Fiore had asked why and Dionne had just said “life happens”.
Fiore supposed that was true, since less and less people had spoken to him as he got older and more people had died, but it didn’t make him feel any better. The thing that did was Dionne being around. It was a reminder that he wasn’t completely alone, that Christmas joy still existed, that…that…
“Does that church mean anything to you?” Dionne’s voice asked.
Fiore could see a tall, white church, glowing in a hazy, ghostly color. In the shadows, he could make out statues of angels and graves, as though he were in a cemetery. The air was thick with longing and sorrow, something that he could feel choking him, even though he had no heart, no blood.
“I never saw it before. But we can look together. We might be closer to Vietta.” Fiore said, his own voice sounding too far away for it to be real.
As they trudged on in the snow, Dionne still holding his hand, Fiore thought that even though it didn’t make sense, it would soon. The universe had led him to Dionne and with him, the insanity wasn’t so suffocating.
The desolate winter was not something to fear.
Tale Twelve-Where love strings sting
Dimitri, a bunny doll
Gifted to Camden one Christmas Eve
Dimitri stayed close with Camden
He’d stay silent for Camden
He was but a toy
A thing to be quietly played with
A creature to coax out joy
But Dimitri is many things
He can be a monster
He can be a dream
He can be a human
He’s a thing that isn’t seen
And when Camden grew into a teen
Dimitri was a boy
Who still loved Camden
Camden knew not what he was
But cared for him all the same
From friends to boyfriends
Nothing would keep them apart
Christmas Eve came again
Dimitri revealed the truth of his nature
Sewed Camden close to his own body
Now he’s more human than ever
With Camden by his side
Christmas is made all the better
Tale Thirteen-To a safe place
Nathalia held onto Waylen, burying her face into her older brother’s shirt. He was carrying her away to somewhere “safer”, away from their parents, who wanted to sacrifice her to Yamileth.
She had heard of Yamileth before, the snowy angel who was supposed to stop the cold to anyone who gave her a worthy enough little girl. Nathalia loved her, but she hoped that by loving her, then Yamileth would stop asking for sacrifices. That the cold wouldn’t come and everyone would be happier.
It hadn’t happened, though. Her older cousin, Novalie, may have spoken up against the sacrifices, but nobody would listen to her, so Novalie sent them both away.
Nathalia hoped that the place would actually protect her, that she wouldn’t have to worry about Yamileth again.
“We’re here.” Waylen said.
Nathalia turned around and saw that right in front of her was a dark, looming house, with cracked windows and dirtied yellow curtains, the front door a crack open and a faint, white glow coming from inside.
She held onto Waylen tighter than before, but he didn’t stop. He continued towards the house, saying to her:
“I know it looks scary, but I promise, she won’t hurt you.”
He didn’t continue, but she didn’t run. Where would she go?
In his arms, she knew that the bad would be behind her. Her beating heart, her spiraling thoughts, they were not to be listened to. The house may not have been beautiful, but it would protect her.
Waylen loved her too dearly to hurt her.
Tale Fourteen-Christmas angel
High up in heavens
Yamileth awaited for Christmas
For once it came
She gave the people joy
Bringing warmth to all
And keeping away the cold
The children would smile
Their hearts would rise from within
Yamileth saw extra happiness in the little girl’s eyes
Perhaps because they had her spark
Yet somewhere along the lines
The snow got too bitter
The people wanted “real” warmth
Their misery twisted their souls
And they saw Yamileth as a demon
Not an angel
Little girls got sacrificed to her
In hopes the cold would go away
She couldn’t do that
So she took the sorrow spirits
Kept them as safe as she could
Maybe one day she could stop the sacrifices
But always, she would love the kids
For deep down, Yamileth was a Christmas angel
Tale Fifteen-Snowy scares
There once was a little clown girl
She was bright like a cupcake
Her name was Konfetti
And she smiled like stars
For laughter and whimsy was what she loved to bring
Christmas Eve made her sing
On a foggy, white snow day
Konfetti went outside to play
She made snow angels and a snowmen
She’d talk to herself, in her mind, she had friends
Another little clown girl was right next door
Making snow monsters galore!
That’s right!
Not snow men, but snow MONSTERS!
With twisting claws and leering grins
It’d bring a terror no one could send away
But not Konfetti
She wanted to stay
So she joined the other clown girl with her snow scares
She made a new friend called Spooky
And no one could compare
Tale Sixteen-Enchantments of Christmas
“Well, I think you should play in the snow!” Paola beamed.
She couldn’t actually smile, as she was a ballerina marionette, but Saorise imagined that she was trying to smile and so, she set out to the snow, only to stop at the door and say:
“I’m not wearing anything suitable for this kind of weather. Won’t I be cold?”
“There are coats on the coat rack that you can use.”
Saorise turned her head towards the coat rack next to the front door and picked a white fur one, a coat that a rich woman would have worn and then, she took Paola with her.
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“What is this place?” Saorise asked as she rolled up a snow ball.
She was making snow balls and piling them up as a pyramid, talking to Paola, who she set on the porch of the mansion.
Only seconds ago, Saorise was celebrating Christmas at her Grandparents’ house and then, when she held Paola, she got sent to a mansion decorated for the holidays surrounded by snow, the kind of dreamy place that would be in Christmas cards and so, she wondered…what was the place supposed to be?
“It’s…it’s my home. I lived here. It’s always pretty, but it’s the prettiest on Christmas!” Paola said cheerfully.
As Saorise made the snowballs, she looked deep into the surrounding woods, the woods that were full of shadows, that sometimes had moving forms. She wasn’t sure wha was there, but it looked too dreary, too foreign for her to venture.
She pushed away the small, lingering sense of unease and continued to make snowballs, not minding her cold hands. It wasn’t that cold, anyway.
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Saorise had spent a good few hours making snow angels and snow balls and so, after a while, she went back inside, taking Paola with her.
Back inside, to where the Christmas tree glittered with ornaments and tinsel and the long table was set with a dinner fit for royalty, with gleaming roasted potatoes and colorful vegetables, candelabras flickering in a way that almost looked like winking.
Saorise put Paola on a bench and took off the coat, again, wondering how such a dinner could be made.
She didn’t complain, though. She just walked over to the table, still holding Paola, ready to live out her dream-
The floors creaked with her steps. There seemed to be more dark shadows than there were before, shadows that twisted and turned…and the fireplace…it stopped…everything was so, so cold….
One of the lamps seemed to glow a little bit more than the rest. It was a tall, elegant lamp with a white lampshade, decorated with pearls twirling in a way reminiscent of wedding dresses and angels…angels…
“Hello, girls.”
Tale Seventeen-A chilling void
Christmas has settled in yet again
There’s gifts to be given
And memories to be lived
But for some, nothing happens
No one’s there to bring the cheer
And holidays lose their meaning
When nobody is near
A sense of longing mixed with regret
The snow keeps falling
But the home is quiet
There was a time when magic was anywhere
When nothing meant everything
A time when time itself seemed to go on forever
Now there’s no calls and no visits
In the heart
There is but a chilling void
Tale Eighteen-Home is the claws
“You’re all ready to go?” Dad asked.
Fannie nodded. She was at the front door, wearing her pretty purple dress. She wanted to look all nice for him, because what she was going to do was very, very important.
Her parents stood at the front door with her, then, Mom opened the door and out they went.
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“Will Samael have toys?” Fannie asked.
She was sitting in the back of the car, Dad was driving, Mom was sitting next to him. They were taking her to the woods, where she would go and be with Samael for a bit. By doing that, he would stop the cold. He’d bring her back home, apparently.
Fannie didn’t understand how he could stop the cold or why she had to be with him, but her parents told her that he was magical and she was the right person for him, so she did not ask any questions. If her parents said so, then they must have been right.
“He’ll have lots of them. He wants you to be happy.” Mom said.
Lots of toys? That sounded like fun, but where would she even go? How could she find Samael?
The car jerked to a stop and Fannie hurriedly unbuckled her seatbelt at the urging of her parents, running out into the vastness of white.
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Fannie walked down the snow, looking for something that would help her. Her parents had just dropped her off and then drove away, leaving her behind. Maybe if she kept walking, then she would find Samael.
She wore tights underneath her dress, which looked nice, but didn’t do anything to protect her from the biting, bitter air. Her parents had told her to “dress like she was going to a Christmas party”, but why? Why couldn’t she just wear pajamas? Her blue nightgown back home was so comfortable and would be so much nicer to wear than-
Claws. White, long claws reaching out from the snow. Her parents told her to look for the claws and grab for them, so that’s what Fannie did.
The claws were Samael’s. Samael would protect her.
Tale Nineteen-Watching, waiting
Every Christmas
Flykra would watch the humans with their families
All together and happy were they
In just one another’s company
But Flykra knew how to make them smile more
A snowy show for them
Magic straight from her claws
She could pull snowflakes from her arms
Could make the snow a kaleidoscope of colors
Just like rainbows reflected in the jagged ice
The sun’s glow in the early morning winter sky
She’d only show herself to few
She’d watch and wait
Only the sparkle of Christmas
Could keep her around
Nothing much would happen in the months before
There would be a span of nothingness
And then would come Flykra
Bringing whimsy
For as long as the holidays would keep her
Tale Twenty-Better together
Spooky grunted as she placed the Christmas snowman blow mold on the ground. There was so much snow that the blow mold wouldn’t stay on properly and though she was a magical clown, it wasn’t like her powers would make it easier. She could not use her hands but levitating the decorations still wouldn’t make them stand up right.
She knew that she did not have to, but she wanted to. Decorations were beautiful, Halloween or Christmas. It brought her joy to bring life to the dark, broken-down house with the cracked, cobwebbed windows that she and her clown wife, Scary, shared. There was just a sense of morbid whimsy with the season of the holly-jolly mixed with the macabre, but…
Why couldn’t the decorations stand up the way they were supposed to? Why were they so heavy? Why-
“Do you need help?”
Spooky turned around. Standing right behind her was Scary, her black and purple hair cascading down her pale face, her wide, white eyes were streaked with concern.
“You want to help? But you don’t like Christmas.” Spooky said, because didn’t Scary flinch from anything related to Christmas? At the very moment, Scary was fidgeting like she wanted to run.
And she was offering to help her?
“Yes, I know that I don’t like it, but you working by yourself isn’t fair. So, I want to help.” Scary said with a sharp-toothed smile.
Spooky stared at her for a long time. Her heart was swirling inside of her at the prospect of her and her wife working together, putting up Christmas decorations, bringing the cheer.
And then, she said that Scary could help and the both of them decorated for Christmas, together.
Tale Twenty-One-Stay away
There’s a creature called Amethyst
Forever discontent
She watches families every Christmas
She wishes for friends
She longs for the closeness of couples
When Nelle and Rhodes walked out in the snow
Amethyst snatched Rhodes away and she wouldn’t let him go
She’s made him a monster with her magic
Forever wandering the Earth
He looks for his love
But she’ll keep him away
He’s going to stay away from his hopes
Hollow heart on Christmas Eve
Amethyst has given him a miserable heart
But how happy is she?
Tale Twenty-Two-Fractured friendship
Years and years ago
There were once two friends
Sardonyx and Zuleika
As close as close could be
They spent sleepovers together
And went to each other’s birthday parties
But no time was brighter
Than Christmas time
For in the woods, they’d put on a Christmas play
Zuleika was a bunny
And Sardonyx was a snow princess
There was no rhyme or reason to their play
Just magic and madness
All was right and pretty
Until Blodwyn came along
It happened in middle school
Blodwyn liked Zuleika
The two became fast friends
Then it became a group of three
Sardonyx was included but she still felt left behind
Why did Zuleika like her?
Nobody hated Sardonyx yet the jealousy grew strong
It lasted to teen years, it was that long
And one Christmas, Sardonyx could not take it anymore
She burned Blodwyn and stabbed Zuleika
But they both got her, in the end
Christmas is about being together
Yet a bond is all fractured
Just because there were more than two friends
Tale Twenty-Three-Rot away
Dimitri’s a bunny toy
Left in someone’s trash
He was a Christmas gift for a little boy
Then he was thrown away
He knows he can be human if he tried
If he found the boy again
His soft heart is all tangled up
Snow falls around the trash can
Happiness is all around
Yet Dimitri is still all alone
Rotting away
But he won’t give up
He’s not a toy
He’s magic
And if Dimitri dreams enough
He’ll see that boy again on Christmas
He’ll be human
They will be together
No matter what
Tale Twenty-Four-Bonded forevermore
On a Christmas Eve night
Rhodes wandered the winter woods
All alone and losing hope
He saw her standing under a tree
The very tree where his body lay
He knew not when the evil woman would come again
But his wife stood under that tree
Rhodes ran towards her as fast as he could
Swept Nelle up in his arms, kissed her, as he should
She held him close, told him she missed him
Off they went before that evil woman could come for them
Safe they are in their own little house
A Christmas Eve together
Now nothing can keep them apart
Tale Twenty-Five-Never too monstrous
Grant’s an elf, but not the jolly kind
He’s got to eat dead birds all of the time
He lurks in the darkness, when it’s late at night
His friend Parker doesn’t find him a gory sight
And yet all the same
He feels all alone
Like a monster that no one wants
He doesn’t know where it’s from
But especially on Christmas
When he’s crouched on the snow
The corpse of a bird in his claws
Grant’s heart does not glow
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I said I wouldn’t do it but the fact that it only needs one more review sells it for me. Let’s read these Christmas-y tales =D
Also, this should be a comma in the dialogue after Christmas :/And another reminder that dialogue punctuation and formatting is very important, and also very important that you get into the habit of using it correctly.
First story is very cute. I like the premise and the execution!
Second story reminds me of the Netflix Series Dark…with the dead birds ^^°
And also of Himiko Toga from MHA with the eating of small animals.
Ah she calls them Scary and Spooky, in Tale 4, huh?
The tale about a kid being sacrificed to a monster that doesn’t want the sacrifice seems very familiar… I think I read this one before. Hmmm
In Tale 7, isn’t it a bit contradictory that the “angel” first asks Vietta if she wants to play with her sister and then offers to …get rid of the sister?
Tale 8 works pretty well as a short story.
Tale 11 is pretty confusing tho, even if it has Vietta returning. I wish there was more to it, bc as it stands I don’t rly see the theme.
I like that in Tale 13, we are getting another glimpse into the sacrifice thing with Yamileth and that at least someone is trying to push back against the practice—if only by running away.
I also feel like Tale 16 could have used more context to hammer home the impact of the final sentence.
Oh Tale 18 is before she meets Spooky and Scary? No wonder she is so trusting of the scary ppl if she expected someone to find in the woods.
There’s again these weird repetitions from dialogue into narration here in tale 20:
Instead of simply repeating what the dialogue already stated, why don’t you give more context to how Scary doesn’t like Christmas or another detail abt that that isn’t just an exact repetition??
I plan on writing more lore for Vietta. You guess correctly that this %u201Cangel%u201D is not really an angel.
Thx for reading!
Hey there, creeperfeverdreams! This is Alex, here for a review. Wishing you Happy Holidays, on I slay to the incredible Christmas takes!
Tale one
Sho-ho-hort and sweet like candy cane! (does this count as a pun? TvT)
I like the basic elements. There's nothing too complex to grasp. I was riddled at a few instances so I'd return to that. Flykra is charismatic with kids, and loves them enough to show tricks and make them have fun. The girl, Layna, is a very plain character. She blends in the background with no individuality whatsoever. But I think it was a clever way to make her relatable, as if any girl could put herself in her shoes and imagine Flykra to have come to themself, instead of Layna. I'm sure the incredibly short length of the work is also to blame for the lack of character building.
There's your famed eerie magic! Scary but en-deer-ing. I actually found this scene in-tree-dibly cunning and well executed. It is uncomfortable and still has humor- you really pull off the most difficult combination so effortlessly.
Nice, lore-y and chilling imagery.
Wait, wasn't this Christmas? This was the part that actually confused me. Or are you talking about next year's here?
Rest everything looks good!
Tale two
A vampire in the family of elves? Now, isn't that a fascinating idea!
I actually loved how you organised this one. There's a com-bell-ing (hehe) backstory, a vulnerable monologue and deep rooted insecurity and dysphoria. I liked how you depict him being the lone reindeer in the herd. The gloominess is off the charts, really! But it's so very well written.
The only complain I have involves his bestfriend, Parker. For someone so significant to the protagonist, I'd have liked to see more of him. Instead there's not one proper portrayal of his. Just a littleeee disappointed there. He had loads of potential, I hope you expand on him sometime!
Tale three
These appear established characters. Uhhh hate that I don't know who they are. From the description, i guess it may be her lover's blood relative
Now that's some through explaining, kudos! I can imagine imagine Casiane turning '(s)no(w), thanks' whenever she finds out it's not her lover, Novalie. Well, my guess about that woman being related mistle(missed)-toe(too) bad!
A shattering state-mint!
Overall, the story was won-deer-ful. The pain behind their story is con-stag-ious and the longing of Casiane is captivating. I love how, in the distance, there's joy in the memory of when the lovers met in December.
Perfect story claus nothing captures love quite like yearning for your partner even after years have passed.
Tale four
I believe these are again, existing characters of yours. Still its amazing how you give all this detail to get the reader acquainted and familiar.
The general setting is nice. Especially the inner monologue describing how Fannie feels at home with the clown women despite the house not being in the best condition. It really goes on to justify- not the walls, but its the people within it that make it a home.
The flashback scene evoked such a strong sense of hurry. Perhaps it has something to do with Fannie's origin. I do not have enough information to appreciate it much, but I can tell it's significant from the way you've phrased it. I do think, however, that this scene was too short to establish the intended infact. Also, the ending looks rather abrupt. The reader isn't even revealed what the gift is, or what Fannie's reaction to it. It almost makes me question- did any event even occur in the present time behind the unfolding monologue? When we look deeper, this story appears a little shallow and quite static. But overall, good work with the writing.
Tale five
Oooh, a poem- just my kind of thing!
Well the rhymes are santa(certain)-ily all over the [s]furnace[s] uhh. place.
May I present this edited version-
It was a Christmas in 1950
Aize, a teenage boy, took Lilia
-his sister, out to get a pinecone
While they were out in the snow
Their parents, Irene and Chandler
Were by the fireplace in the house
Cozy together & waiting on the kids
Not knowing it all would go amiss
An awful creature with claws & teeth
Snatched them as they screeched
Kids came back to nobody home
Christmas cheer had gone dry
But at least both their parents
Went up to the Heavens high
After their untimely demise
I've tried to bind the structure to my best of the capabilities here. But the changes are completely optional as the original poetry is just as good!
The story in itself is pretty grim. Nothing too complicated, still all too sad. No unwanted drama, I liked how you kept it simple.
Tale six
I think I've read one tale about Yamileth already - this was a pleasant surprise! It's such a fearful concept though. What if some of our most difficult and painful rituals truly vain? Even the thought makes me shiver.
On its own, I find it somewhat lacking. There's no real material. As I already knew of the basic concept of this one already, I didn't see anything new or innovated. The same confusion was mentioned in the work I read earlier, what makes this story different and special? It looks a little mistakenly recycled, if you understand what I'm getting at.
Nothing faulty about the things that you did write though, all looks alright.
Tale seven
Okay my own heart was racing with this one.. phew.
The suspicions of Vietta invoke fear within the reader. She sounds so sure of something being odd about her shadow, despite never turning back to see for herself. It's like one of those gut feeling you can't shake. The being calling its-elf (lol) an angel seems rather unbelievable, given the way it talks. Yet its appearance is supportive of the claims it makes. But by the end of the story, I think it's clear. The creature is not what it says it is, as we see its presence contaminate Vietta's thoughts and behaviour. She is driven to cause harm to her own sister!
This one has got to be the spookiest till now. It might've been even better if it explored the real identity of that being or gave us a glimpse deeper into Vietta's true personality. Otherwise, stellar writing!
Take eight
Oh my, so Amethyst is the creature who snatched Irene and Chandler! Don't I love a from both perspectives. I was feeling so bad for the kids to return as orphans, yet I sympathise with Amethyst's pain just the same. There's no right side, is there?
Amethyst monologue depicting all that she endures so that the Christmas magic can work is so much more condensed and heavier than the poetry about the en-deer-ing family. The contrast is incredibly striking, skillful writing on your part! She seeks justice by damning the parents the same hell she must live in, when she is of no use. How cruel yet I feel sorry for her. The fact that I am seeing her emotions beyond her actions goes to show how well you've portrayed them.
I wasn't really expecting two of these stories to be so intrinsically connected, this has been a welcome surprise. Like the two sides of the same coin of.
Tale nine
Another poetry, great!
I think 'meet' is a better substitute for 'intertwine' here.
Now aren't these a jolly bunch! Seem like such exciting characters, honestly.
How about 'exist' instead of 'live'?
This is a tricky ending! No worries, let's try to fix this..
To begin with, I think we can do away with the last line altogether. It's taking away much impact. Also second and go above as first. Also, try splitting the second line and putting it's second half (after the comma) into the next line. Now we've got an overall unform structure.
The overall story is silly and and very likeable!
Tale ten
Okay this was AMAZING!! I didn't take you for a professional poet, but more of a storyteller who sometimes resorted to poems as a way to express them. But this was well written. The perfect rhyming, the smooth pacing and the impeccable imagery- you've outdone yourself.
Such strong and true words! My favourite lines, undisputedly.
The portrayal of a desperate wife looking for her husband is nothing new. But you've displayed it so gracefully that it feels personal and worrying. Thr reader is witnessing this journey of hers, hoping she succeeds in finding what she looks for- the husband nature so cold heartedly took from her. A marvellous poem!
Take eleven
Vietta mentioned! So another set of interconnected takes, you're impressive.
It looks like Fiore is as suspicious of the angel as me, finally someone sees me! I'm getting a little bothered by the lack of background of Dionne as to what he means to Fiore. They do not appear as lovers and are too unfamiliar to be friends. Perhaps strangers lost together? But the repeated mention of his mere presence being a comfort bring me back to the theory of them being lovers, it's like an endless circle uhhh.. This could use some clarity at your end, I believe.
I can sense the setting of the story isn't same as of the one before this. Even from their correlation, I cannot extract much. I'm not aware if this is your will or limitation, but the ignorance is a little annoying.
Again, about the lack of action. I feel like nothing much 'happens' in the story again, making the reader lose interest. As soon as the climax arrives about what is in the church, the story is cut off. I feel you're really evading to answer the suspense and I'm afraid it's getting a little frustrating - having all these questions never to be answered. The stories are incomplete in spa way that affects their meaning and importance. You could really work on that.
Even Fiore's character was mediocre at best. There's not much building involved and the fact that I can tell that isn't really good news. Other than that, nothing objectively wrong was found in this take.
Tale twelve
Sweet! From a bunny doll to a boyfriend. The nature of its complex being makes this transformation possible. Effortlessly logical and plain. I'm afraid this one didn't peak my interest like the others but on itself, it does a whole lot better. No character void or unanswered queries- that's a job well done.
The dynamics are also pretty compatible. The bunny doll which has always loved the boy and the teen loving his doll back even when he doesn't completely understand it. Cute!
I don't have anything else to say about it, except it'd have been even more interesting if you explain the origin of this complicated existence and why the bunny doll loved the boy so much. Rest everything looks great.
Tale thirteen
A much more personal and filling content around Yamileth! This was what I had been talking about in the previous piece. This one has much more life than its predecessor.
The comfort Nathalia seeks in her brother's arms is so endearing to read. Like nothing can hurt her there- oh the trust she had in him. It seems fitting for such a caring character to rescue her little sister. It's not surprising to find Waylen has a place already in mind. I'm a little disappointed though, that you decide to even leave this mystery hanging.
Also, is this the Novalie from Casiane's tale? Wow, even this was connected! Were still missing major background on this girl though, hoping you cover it in this.
I felt like there could be more story as all of it is really Waylen carrying Nathalia in his arms. You could've shown us where they've gone to and if this person indeed helps them or betrays them to get rid of the winter. If they succeeded, the aftermath of Waylen's response would've been quite fascinating.
Tale fourteen
Another Yamileth piece but a poem- let it come!
I think it'd sound cooler(not literally) if you switched it like-
They saw Yamileth as an angel no more
But as a demon now, with thirst for blood
Just an idea!
Rest of the poem feels repetitive with the earlier tale you wrote about Yamileth. They literally encircle the same ideas. So I don't really have anything new to say here.
I'm a little curious why it always says only little girls though. Are young boys not typically sacrificed?
Tale fifteen
You're on a roll with poems this time!
Mind making a small sacrifice for the flow of reading here? Here's the suggestion-
Whimsy is what she loved to bring
As Christmas Eve made her sing
Aww, so Konfetti is Spooky's childhood friend! The creeper web is really getting to me now. I can imagine you having all of them on a mood board connected by red thread as in murder mysteries lol. How do you even remember them all like I'm amazed!
The contrast in their personalities was well written here. Despite her inclination towards joyful and optimistic things, Konfetti isn't turned away by Spooky's grotesque art. Their different behaviour makes their bond all the more special! I'm impressed of this poem and story, you've done commendable work.
Tale sixteen
Well this piece was certainly interesting. It took me some time to figure out Saorise was a human girl, and not a marionette friend of Paola. The explanation of how they transported was pleasant as it gave us some much needed context.
I think the idea of shadows, though great, didn't lead anywhere. We're introduced to a talking lamp but that's where the story abruptly ends. Comparatively, there's been a great deal of action and thought, but not enough purpose. That could be worked upon.
You have nailed the basics though. Like Saorise heading inside when she senses shadows shows her intrinsic fear without no direct mention. Also the fact that Paola knows where the coat rack is tells us she's more familiar with the place is justified pretty logically as it being her house afterall, where the human visits the first time. Everything else looks good!
Chapter seventeen
This was a lot more hopeless than the other tales here, I don't know what so.. The style is so unique as it introduces no character. A feeling is all it is. Yet, it's thebmost realistic of all. This was something new, and great at that.
A minor nitpick-
I think 'Longing mixed with regret' is a more effective here. You could do away with the 'sense of'.
As you've written this poem about something abstract and not something that happens, you've removed the biggest flaw of such stories- planning and finishing a story. I think this a clever solution you've worked up, great job.
Tale eighteen
I believe this to be the origin story of the Fannie doll? I won-deer how she was transformed from a human- perhaps a curse. Anyways, I liked how this tale gives us an inside peek into her innocent mind. This story actually connected to the specific paragraph from the fourth tale so that is interesting!
Samuel here sounds a lot like Yamileth. I can't help but wonder if Fannie was intended for a sacrifice, but something went wrong. From how you've presented it, Samuel was found dead in the snow, maybe after being caught up in a blizzard. It's peculiar that the parents didn't drive up the entire way and left the girl on her own. It's almost like he's a demon that must be pleased to keep the winter from coming.
This story would've quite amazing, if not only this confusing. We don't actually know what's happening and it's kinda putting me off. I think you could've achieved this by adding the parents' pov here. It would've also livened up their passive characters and given us some context.
Tale nineteen
It seems recurring characters is a theme of this collection of tales- all the more good for me! I don't have much to say for this one. Flykra is a well crafted character in all aspects- simple, Christmas oriented, secretive and always looking. The poetry in itself was very good, like a kid's song of a legend.
I think you were just trying to sound poetic but this phrasing turned out way to twisted. A simple 'They were all together and happy" does just fine here. Rest everything looks good, keep up the great work!!
Tale twenty
Awww, this was romantic. So Scary and Spooky are a couple -cute! I didn't actually pick that up from Fannie's story. I think this was a well-written story, with unexpected romance (that isn't unrequited or longing). The thought that Scary wants to help her wife despite not liking Christmas herself is extremely sweet of her. The ending was also crisp and heartwarming, just like fairytales.
One thing I believe you could have added is why Scary doesn't like Christmas. That would've given the reader some added context and depth. Rest everything was perfect!
Tale twenty-one
So Amethyst strikes again, huh? It's sad to see that her misery persists. The connection that it was her who took Rhodes is insane to me! Oh the plight of Nelle, I can imagine her agony. The way these stories fit together like a jigsaw puzzle is so amazing - kudos to you! It's a crossover I never imagined to like so much.
A banger for the closing! All the pain Amethyst causes to ease her own pain is vain at the end. She has not removed her own suffering, but multiplied it. Her actions aren't justified but pitiful. Such a moving depiction!
Tale twenty-two
Fresh characters and in a poem? Yes please!
Here are some nitpicks-
I understand you trying to suggest they were *really* close but 'spent' still sounds too wierd. 'They did sleepovers together' has a much better ring to it.
'There' seems to be pretty insignificant. How about 'Their play had no rhyme or reason'? It's crisp and all the more impactful!
Otherwise, the story was pretty well planned. Even the smallest seeds of jealousy is capable of uprooting the most hard built relationships- the story captured this fact so well. What was once an endearing friendship ended in disaster just as a third person enters in a bond with a space of only two. Heart-shattering!
Tale twenty-three
Wow, this was intense.. No story, but a tragedy. Nothing happens, but that's the beauty of it. Dmriti hopes to see the boy he was gifted to again, just so it can experience the Christmas cheer as well. The siltation can't be helped and the reader is well aware of this. That's what makes it even more sad. But Dmriti can't do anything else to improve its fate but hope for the best. I'm definitely not crying.
This piece actually caught me off guard. It has your famed fearful magic but is overshadowed by hopelessness. You're stepping out from your usual genre, that deserves an applause!
I do think Dmriti's existence could've been explained betyer, as it's a little muddled up. Also, I'm not sure why it thinks meeting the boy will solve anything- is it the bunny's naivity. If that's the case indeed, then I think it justifiable. Rest everything was perfect here.
Tale twenty-four
A happy ending? Isn't that the ultimate tree-t!
Rhodes and Nelle's story appealed to me the most. Perhaps it's the 360 view from the lens of all the three characters like it really comes all back around. Amethyst's misery, Nelle's longing and Rhodes' madness-the perfect tragic triangle.
Personally though, I found the perspective of Rhodes to be a lot more shallow than that of the ladies. Thre attention is divided between his story and the happy ending. I think I would've appreciated a deeper take more. That's all the advice for this tale!
Tale twenty-five
Can't believe I'm on the last one! So this is a sad account of Grant. It's actually amazing how you've not once used the word vampire for him, yet manage to make it painfully obvious. The poem isn't much eventful, not giving me much material for feedback. But on it's own, it stands strong. I really think placing it before his story would've been much better though. This poem introduces us to Grant while the story expanded on him. Placing it later takes away that impact and we learn nothing new.
Wrapping up
So this is really over.. I'm kinda bummed, not gonna lie. This was an amazing journey. It felt like I was teleporting different worlds, seeing things as a passive observer. Sometimes I'd return to the same dimension seeing the continued story unfold, right where i left things off. It appears dreamy, as it doesn't make sense all the time. Still, it's beautiful! These stories actually introduced me to a bunch of your characters so that was nice. Reviewing this has been a pleasure, hoping I get to read more from you again. Till then, keep writing!
Thank you for reading! I am sorry the stories weren%u2019t all making sense, I was trying to make it make sense but was also busy with holiday stuff so it didn%u2019t come out all right. Grant is some kind of demonic elf creature, his family is a bunch of humans. I%u2019m sorry if it didn%u2019t seem that clear.
But, I am glad that you enjoyed reading this!
Rest assured, I%u2019m not done writing about these characters. I might write about them again next Halloween and Christmas.
Thank you about the clarification! I'm excited to read more about them next Christmas.
Yw! ^v^