Hi there crazystar! Tuck here with a review for you today.
So I'll admit it's a bit difficult to review pieces as personal as this one, but I'm going to try my best to give you some quality feedback on your writing to hopefully be at least a little bit helpful. Let's jump right into it!
I appreciated the way you divided up this work into clearly defined sections. It made it easy to read and your train of thought easy to follow. I also enjoyed the balanced and methodical approach you took in analyzing your situation. You took time to notice the bad but also appreciate the good in a very hard situation, and that's an incredibly valuable skill to have. That in combination with your sincerity made this piece inspiring. I can tell from your skilled analysis of your situation that you'd make a great scientist if that's the career path you desire. Your analytical way of perceiving the world is perfectly suited for a career in STEM research.
One area for improvement that I see is in your sentence structure. Let's take the first paragraph for example:
The lockdown in this side of the world began around March and surely robbed me of all those hopes and ambitions I had about the last year of my school life // The first few days began with a hope that the lockdown would soon be over, the next few days were spent hoping that I could still hold on to the previous hope which now seemed to be drifting and constantly drowning in the sea of doubts and despairs // Well after that, I actually went over a pretty exciting period in my life, which include speaking to trees and walls of my house hoping to get an answer, mugging up all Lewis Capaldi songs and trying to sing them in a seemingly fake Scottish accent, learning Spanish (although my knowledge in the language is limited to 'Gracias' and 'lo siento') and playing at a guitar concert after which my crush had complimented by saying that my singing was bad but my guitar playing skills were worse.#sadLife.
I replaced all the periods with double slashes to more clearly see where sentences end and begin. This last sentence in particular is almost incoherent because it continues on for so long. The reader doesn't have a chance to breathe and recollect, which means that the reader will lose focus towards the end of the sentence. Fortunately this is super easy to fix! All you need to do is split up some of these long sentences and be aware of the effects of long and short sentences on your reader. This article gives some good information on the effects of different sentences on your writing.
And finally, as a bit of housekeeping, I wanted to let you know that I bumped the rating on this work from 16+ to 18+ because of your use of the f-word, which automatically merits an 18+ rating on YWS' system. You can read more about YWS' policies regarding content ratings here. I also removed the personal email address that you included in this work, as sharing personal information like email addresses is against YWS safety rules. Don't worry, you're not in any trouble! I just wanted to make you aware of these changes and explain the reasons for them.
If you have any questions about this review or my moderator actions please let me know and I'll be happy to clarify!