There's not really a scheme or rhyme to this. It just came out and I wrote it down..
After all that we been through, I lost him.
The one guy I loved with all my heart.
He picked her over me,
just to see if it'll work out between them.
He said he loves me.
He said that he always will.
It's just that he needed to make sure I was the one.
He said that he can't completely lose me.
He wants to be in my life.
I told him that I'm happy for him,
even if it's not with me,
cause that's all I want.
For him to be happy,
even if it's not me.
I told him I'll be here,
if he ever needs me.
I told him that I'll always love him,
and that I'll wait for him.
He said I don't know why,
you'd want me back after all I've done.
I said cause that's what you do,
when you love someone,
you forgive them.
I just can't believe I lost him. :,(
It's tearing me apart.
I broke my phone.
Shattered his christmas presents I had for him.
I started SHing again.
I tried to kill myself.
I just couldn't do it.
Cause I knew he wouldn't want me to.
Not that I had an important softball tryout the next day,
not that I have good friends,
and grades.
But I thought of him.
He kept me from it.
It's ripping me to shreds,
and what's sad..
he still makes me happy..
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Yeah.
It just sorta came out..
Oh my dear that is a very dramatically sad poem... great goodness!!!
a poem does not have to rhyme but it has to ... flow. First three lines are great, but maybe you want to make the 4th line a little more... with the flow like
you should break your writing into paragraphs
I think it would be better if you said
He said he #FF0000 ">loved me
He said he always #FF0000 ">would
#FF0000 ">He needed to make sure i was the one
#FF0000 ">He couldn't completely loose me
How about making it more like this
He wants to be in my life
I told him i would be happy for him
even if it wasn't with me
because that is all i want.
To see him happy,
even if its not me.
Sorry for shredding your work, but maybe i will stop now coz i guess you get the idea. Sorry if this review hurt you but really its a nice poem with raw feelings its just not that organized.