In Search Of LIFE.....(do help me out with ur suggestions)

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coy_soni commented · Mon Oct 03, 2005 7:28 am

torsa_n_muse wrote:hello!

i liked your poem. i think it aptly conveys the impulsiveness and feelings that you wanted it too. but personally speaking, i always like poems to more rich in metaphors and imagery , i think they add to its literary value, which i found it missing here. the poem could have been shorter because towards the end the impulsiveness seems to get a bit excessive and hence fails to keep the attention intact.
besides i feel a poem should have an impact such that the reader wants 'more' after it finishes but your poem fill me with satiety.
i guess you wont mind my crit! i just wrote what i felt but at the end of the day, your poem was a nice read!

-torsa

hi!!!
well.. torsa ...i agree with u as far as metaphors n imaginary part is concerned....but would like to tell u that i really didnt make any conscious efforts to write a poem as such or to make it more beautiful...actually these r my thoughts tht often disturb me n i just wrote it as it is.....well m a casual poet....who follows instinct...but thanx for ur comments...i will keep these in mind...n try to make my work better...thanks a lot!!!!
soni

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torsa_n_muse wrote a review · Mon Oct 03, 2005 6:20 am

hello!

i liked your poem. i think it aptly conveys the impulsiveness and feelings that you wanted it too. but personally speaking, i always like poems to more rich in metaphors and imagery , i think they add to its literary value, which i found it missing here. the poem could have been shorter because towards the end the impulsiveness seems to get a bit excessive and hence fails to keep the attention intact.
besides i feel a poem should have an impact such that the reader wants 'more' after it finishes but your poem fill me with satiety.
i guess you wont mind my crit! i just wrote what i felt but at the end of the day, your poem was a nice read!

-torsa

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coy_soni commented · Sun Oct 02, 2005 4:01 pm

Matt Bellamy wrote:I liked the idea of this, but I think there were too many dots......too many exclamation marks and question marks, and too many capitals at the end. Writing should be good enough for you to not need to exaggerate it with so much punctuation, not to mention the fact it looks a bit sloppy and unprofessional.

Looking past those issues, I liked the idea, about why you write and such. So, keep writing.

thanks sam for ur comments...i will take care not to make the same mistakes...thanks a lot..

Matt Bellamy

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Matt Bellamy wrote a review · Sun Oct 02, 2005 3:52 pm

I liked the idea of this, but I think there were too many dots......too many exclamation marks and question marks, and too many capitals at the end. Writing should be good enough for you to not need to exaggerate it with so much punctuation, not to mention the fact it looks a bit sloppy and unprofessional.

Looking past those issues, I liked the idea, about why you write and such. So, keep writing.

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