I love how this is so short and yet very vivid and full of imagery! You're really talanted and I have no complains when it comes to neither structure or flow. I assume you didn't "forget" punctuation and that writing without is your style but personally I prefer reading a text with dots and commas... So hard to breathe without
Giving you 4/5 icky, sticky spiders for this!
Good Luck & Keep Writing
// Demoness
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