Published January 17, 2008
[pre]I can't describe the feeling
I have inside
There are no words that
can really simplify
The sorrow, the cost
The hollow, the loss
I cant take this pain
The aching hole in my heart
I cant take this pain
The broken tears make me fall apart
There are things,
We wont know until we die
There are things,
We don't understand
and don't want to try
Will we ever know-Chorus
Will we ever know why
Will we ever know
Will we ever know why
I knew your smile
and your eyes
But no one, but you
knew the lies
a whisper in your ear
told your mind
Let, the rain fall
and wash you clean
Let, the rain fall
and wash away, what was unseen
Chorus 1 time
Will we ever know
the real you
Will we ever know
the reasons for these
things lost people do
Please Leteth me know what you think! It was hard to right this
it hurts especially when you lose some one when you know
spending one more hour with them, could have saved there life.
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For some reason, when it said "Let the rain fall" I thought of Hillary Duff. 0.o
Scary. I did feel like the chorus was repetitive. It reminds me something but I can not but my finger on it. It sounds like a rap to me. I guess it depends on how you look at it. It could mean something different to anyone I guess. It does seem to sound more like a poem then a song, but it was still well written. Good job.
'twas good... I agree with Jamie, the chorus is pretty repetitive. Um yeah good though keep writing.
I thought that this was really good. my favorite verse is the second verse. It does a really good job of discribing the depth of the emotion.
I think the chorus is to repetitive. If you would make it a little longer and put more words in it, then it might be better-but that is just what I think.
I think this is good. I don't really like the chorus. it seems too repetitive. Idk. My oppinion. Also, the second to the last verse was a bit confusing to me. It just didnzt flow like the rest of the song. This seems more like poetry to me, but that's just my opinion. Loved the meaning behind the words.
Jamie