Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
I never noticed how good people can be. I always thought that deep down, many people were cynics and that many people are careless. But when I look at you, with your gleaming eyes composed from the soft blue sky, I forget all of the hurtful things that people can do. Taunts, insults, and stolid glares from many people around me disappear when I looked into your eyes. Your soft blue eyes makes me feel like a cloud, just drifting by slowly. My heart feels like it's on cloud nine.
When you held your hand out to me in the hallway on the very first day of school, I was so relieved. I thought that every day of school would be alright because of that hand. But I was wrong. Voices from those adversaries would disrupt my mental strength. All I wanted to do was break myself into small little pieces, and wished to begin anew.
Okayy...this is sounding a teensy bit like a lot of other stories I've seen of a similar type, but then there is a reason I do love reading those stories, and you've tapped into an interesting reservoir of emotions there with what we've got going on here. I think this is shaping up to make things a very interesting opening that as a reader you do find yourself asking a few questions about and getting interested in, especially as to whom this protagonist here appears to be talking to because there is clearly quite a few things going on there.
But unlike those voices crafted from yells and shouts, yours is smooth and deep, as if it were the currents flowing endlessly in a river of peace, making me wish to tell you all my troubles and what makes me feel blue. Your eyes bring out the concealed joy within me. Yet I always look away to play it safe. Then I notice how empty your hand is, oh my heart tugs at me to hold it firmly. However I feel like it would be wrong of me to do so.
Until then, all I can do is sit here. Waiting, waiting for the day where I can embrace you instead of feeling blue.
Hmm, well this is all quite something here I think. You've built up some pretty neat emotions here and you are capitalizing quite well on them I think to bring things to this particular point and especially that ending does make you as a reader want to find out more there. I don't know if this is meant to be a standalone short story of if there is more to it, but I do know that I would personally love to read more here and find out what is happening here in a bit more detail.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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