Published November 10, 2009
On stranger nights than these,
I have lain awake,
Unmoving, but breathing.
And with eyes closed, imagining you
Beside me,
Feeling your breath upon my face,
Your kiss upon my cheek.
On stranger nights that these,
I have lain awake.
Unmoving, and waiting.
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Nice!
Its a simple poem, but a beautiful one, and (thank goodness) free from annoying grammatical errors and such. Very well done!
-Realms.
(P.S. The only i would change is the kiss upon the cheek. A kiss on the cheek is, less, i dunno, meaningful. You might want to change it to "lips." lol but thats just my preference.)