Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well...this was a fun little start here to this story..certainly was quite an intriguing prologue here. It does make you think that there could be quite an interesting story to come here behind all of what's happening here.
Anyway let's get right to it,
At first, it felt like we were meant to be.
Ours wasn't a typical romance. It wasn't as if our eyes met from across the room and this fluffy feeling erupted inside us.
Hmm...okay...looks like the cliches from most romance stories are being immediately denounced here right from the start which is an interesting way to get this story off the ground there....certainly gets you attention early in the prologue here.
No.
Our love was gentle. It took time. And for that very reason, we believed it was true love.
Hmm...well, that does sound pretty nice so far...it appears to just be a bit of a introduction although the use of past tense there kinda makes me feel that something may have gone very wrong here...
The first time I saw him, he didn't strike me as particularly attractive. In fact, his nasal voice annoyed me and I took pains to stay away from him. Some days later, you could almost say that I had forgotten about his existence entirely.
Okay...looks like things are being taken right back to the beginning there...and well...I suppose the prologue does appear to be setting something up soo...well let's see where this goes before any decisions are made here.
Then by a twist of fate, we were assigned to do a school work together. Locked inside four walls with no company but each other, we talked. And talked and talked and talked. It surprised me how much we had in common. I felt like I had found my other half. We had the same dreams, the same opinions...and we were both broken emotionally for no fault of our own. Broken and cast aside by the people we loved most of all.
Okayy....well that's a sweet moment there...the flow is working surprisingly well so far and this appears to just be a very wholesome story here of a friendship just being born like that and turning into even more there by the looks of it. Certainly puts a smile on your face that one.
But we fit together like pieces of a puzzle..so well that I couldn't see the cracks anymore. With him I felt whole. Complete.
He was the first to confess.
Well..this is really going towards a lot of happiness which is definitely making me paranoid to see what horrors could possibly be lying in wait to this wonderful tale here.
I cried a lot that day, out of happiness or fear I didn't know. The next day I told him it was too soon for me to think of a relationship, and my heart burst when he told me he would wait.
Despite my best efforts, I was slowly falling in love.
Well...that does seem like a pretty healthy situation there...and hmm...my hope that this prologue cuts out on a happy note continues to increase now. This really seems to just be a wholesome tale of love so far.
Then, he changed.The change was subtle. Not easily noticeable. But I felt it. It cut deep.
And now, my love hurts more than ever.
Oh..well that's what I was afraid of...well sort of, I was expecting an outside force to cause some trouble but it appears its not quite that..in fact I think this makes it even more impactful here to have that be the cause of everything...
This might seem like just another sob story. I'm not denying it. But if I do not tell it to anyone else, I cannot sort out my feelings. So please listen to me. And maybe, just maybe...I might have my happy ending after all.
Well...I would certainly love to see a happy ending..cause well...I do love those..hmm....interesting end there to the prologue but I think it is quite fitting, it sets up the story to come quite nicely there. You've done a pretty good job there.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, a fairly solid prologue this one...it certainly seems to cover a decent bit of what you would expect from a prologue..and it seems like the sort of story that I would want to follow.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
And I want to know how/why he changed. That sounds like it's going to be a big part of the story. I can't wait to read more!
I'll keep in mind all your suggestions and once I'm through with the whole work I'm planning on rewriting it. Thanks again, and I hope you can review my chapter one too.
Points: 254038
Reviews: 4101
Donate