Young Writers Society

I really like this! Well done! And, also, welcome to YWS! I don't see any spelling errors and your rhyme scheme is nearly perfect, so good job!
There are two main problems that I see here, the first of which being the lack of punctuation at the end of each line. Some of them have exclamation points and one has a comma, but I believe that is not enough. I'm not judging by the number of times you used punctuation, but the way it effects your poem. In poetry, the main punctuation is commas, because periods tend to only show up at the end of stanzas for reading purposes. Commas really help the mood of a poem, to help certain points or statements stick out, make things more dramatic, or just let the reader breathe. 'Cause commas are almost always put where people would take a breath, and, as there are limited periods in a poem, we need to breathe somewhere, right? Yeah, most of us aren't reading your poetry out loud, but we are reading in our heads like we are speaking it. So, commas at the end of every line or so to influence the mood and help us breath would be a really, really beneficial thing to add.
Also, capitalization! Unless you are making the stylistic choice to lack any capitalization, it is almost always mandatory at the beginning of each line. You do this throughout the beginning of the poem, but you lack it in a few spots at the bottom.
Also, in the punctuation department, periods can be helpful, just in fewer spots than commas. Now, since this is an influential poem, explanation points may, and probably will in your case, be used more often. I would like to point out that end-sentence punctuation makes a great spot for stanzas, which I think are necessary in all but a few stylistic poems. So stanzas would be quite welcome in this poem, and helpful to the reader, which is generally one of the main goals of writing anything. So five or so stanzas would be nice and influential throughout this poem.
Well, besides those few points, your poem is fine! I really do like it, and you did a fantastic job of writing it. Keep up the great work! I look forward to reading more of your things in the future!
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Hello, and welcome to YWS!! I hope you like it here as much as I do and that you learn a lot from the people here!

Though my eyes are dark, never to see light

I sense their souls, aflame with light

Of how the young accomplish

what was left undone

by adults and nay-sayers,

by everyone!

Welcome to the Young Writer's Society!!!!!! Hopefully I didn't hurt your ears, that was pretty loud. I hope you love it here and will feel tremendous joy when you look back at your first published work in a year and see just how far you've come. Being on this site has improved my writing a lot and I hope it does the same for you. Anyway, I should probably read this poem and get on with my review.

For upon every face, a radient smile!
This is just a nitpick, but radiant has an A instead of an E.

But I do know this... even in suffering
With them I would gladly go...
Since you already used the word 'know' in the previous line, this sounds a little repetitive. My advice would be the remove I do know this and just have But even in suffering. I think that would still flow nicely.

It's a beautiful story you've got here. Even though it's a poem, I love the story you've written about. To me, the old (are they old?) blind person was telling us about the bravery and hope which the young radiate, even when they have to deal with all the problems adults hand down to them. Adults who have lost hope, which the old person no doubt had, until he saw the youth and that hope was regained. That's my interpretation at least. This a lovely poem. Please keep sharing your writing with us!

WELCOME!
This is going to be my first time reviewing a poem, so if this review sucks then, well, blame me? Idk.



Just to begin with, I absolutely loved this poem. I love the rhyming (actually I like any poem that rhymes) and how you managed to make it about war (my praise means nothing as I know nothing about poems...)
Plus I'm usually not that interested in war so... good job!

Though my eyes are dark, never again to see light

doing impossible things, so many stories untold!

With them I would gladly go...

Greetings, this is my first written work on YWS so I hope you like it!