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YES YES YES. You do not know how long I've been looking for something to read (that's not published work). This is everything I look for in a fantasy novel, it starts off mysterious, and I like mysterious.
The only things I would suggest is that:
1) Leave out the part about the wolf, it doesn't really contribute anything to the story. It IS a good bit of description though. Maybe you can find a way to add it in later?
2) Leave out the part about the bull, and Spanish arena. It takes away from the whole "fantasy" theme; it's too modern.
But otherwise this is fantastic. Keep up the good work! I can't wait to read more.
Cheers!
Raye