Published August 12, 2010
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Hi Chazzer! I can find only two little mistakes. (I love the icon, by the way.)
In the first "I'm scared," you use a contraction. In the repetition of this phrase, you don't. So, following this patter, why don't you change the second "I'm aware" to "I am aware"?
"Yourself" should be "you."
Overall, I love the topic of this poem. John F. Kennedy for the win! I don't think your rhymes are too simplistic at all! Remember, though, a song doesn't have to rhyme to be wonderful! A great example of a non-rhyming song is "Across the Universe," by the Beatles. Anyway, good job!
- Abigail