Published January 11, 2011
missing someone
what does that mean?
is it the frustration
or a deep devastation
to see her smile
and hear her laugh
with her funny stories
that never runs out
it took a day
to change a lifetime
just like that
just like that
now i know
how precious the memories
now i know
because it's all that was left
i saw her smile
i heard her laugh
but where is she
what i found was ache in my heart
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This is truly sad, but it's very beautiful at the same time. It's always so hard to lose someone
My only suggestion is this:
"i saw her smile
i heard her laugh
but where is she
what i found was an ache in my heart"
Just add the "an" part, and I think you'll be set! Keep up the good work!
wow this is very beautiful! it's very touching. I like how there are no capital letters, and I must say, it runs pretty smoothly and is very sad
I can really understand, as a reader, how you are feeling. What a powerful piece of writing!
yes it was about my cousin, left too young.. she has three lovely children
This is very touching may i ask is it about someone :'(