Published January 26, 2010
The world is turning around so fast, I swear I'm falling off the edge!
Why is it turning so fast?!
Does it want to get rid of me that bad?
What kind of sin did I commit?
Stealing from Mom's cookie jar?
Sticking gum in my friends hair accidentally? (maybe on purpose?)
On second thought my crimes are endless...
Ack!! Me brain is smoking because of too many thoughts?
Alas! Tis' the end of me...
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A DREAM?? I'VE WASTED MY SPEECH ON A DREAM! 
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I think that this belongs in Experimental, if there is such a thing- I honestly don't remember. As far as edit's go:
"maybe on purpose?"
Capitalize the maybe.
"Ack!! Me brain is smoking because of too many thoughts?"
I think you should delete the second exclamation point, change Me to My, and I'm not sure if that should be a question mark on the end.
"Alas! Tis' the end of me... "
I think it should be 'tis, not Tis'.
Other than that, an interesting, if confusing work. Do elaborate- I would be thrilled to read more.
This isn't a story. You wrote a few sentences, seemingly as they occurred to you, and they have no effect. If you want, you can explore these particular thoughts and make them into a story. But you already know that
I'm not exactly sure what you were going for with this, so I'm also not sure if you achieved it. I see you've posted it in the fiction sections though... It's awfully short to be a story, but I like the stream of consciousness style narrative you've posted. I like how each one of the character's thoughts adds on to the last one. It's cute, and funny.
I definitely think you should flesh it out, though. It ended too soon. See if you can add some description and maybe let the reader know a bit more about what's going on.
Anyway, welcome to YWS. If you have any questions about how it works around here, let me know.