You've described this world around you, now I want to know what makes it special. What gives it the "My" world from the title? If I stood in the same place described, I doubt I would see it in the same was as it's presented here, just because everyone has their own unique viewpoint of things. I might focus more on the ground beneath my feet rather than they sky because I'm curious like that.
My advice is to pick one thing and expand. Ex: "So pure I feel apart of it" How do you feel when you're a part of it (two words, by the way, unless you mean that you feel separate? I can't quite tell). Give us your own special point of view ^_^
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