Hello Hello, It seems we have a bunch of new members welcome I hope you enjoy your time here. First off I just want to say I love the mood you put into this it toes the line between a sweet tender moment and a weary melancholy it works well. I don't want to pry into your life but it does seem like something you hold fondly I hope regardless of what happened, both of you are doing well.
I also just want to say I love the imagery mostly because I am a sucker for rich prose. The use of a peach and rotting gives a heavy impact and I love ending off with it. Not to mention the certain details you use like the origami show that this is based on your life and adds to the overall vividness.
The only thing I do have a question about is I don't understand if the lack of capitalization is meant for an effect or not. If it is then forgive me for not getting it on my first read.
Other than that keep up the work I enjoyed it stay hydrated and once again welcome.
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