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CHAPTER III Cami
"Follow me,” Aballa said. We walked back to the room with the piano in it, and sat down. "You need to know something, something that will make it much least difficult for you to fight tomorrow."
"There isn't going to be a fight. They'll run, trying to protect someone, or something."
"Whatever, you still must know it. When i was very young, Javier had a wife, Imari. She was a vampire, but neither of them were harmful people, and they never caused problems. They had loved each other with such a love, that even seeing them together made you feel it too. I'm not sure how she actually died, but I know the wolves did it. They killed her, we never saw her again, but that next week was the first time we crossed the river to attack them. We have killed so many wolves since that night," Aballa said with a wicked grin on her face.
"So your saying all of this is there fault?" I asked.
"Of course. We would never kill someone who did nothing. We would never hurt others by killing someone who we seem to need. You don't understand, she was my mother, in my mind, but she was. I loved her with all my heart, as she lead me through this life. At the time, Javier was my father, but when she died, he became the cold person he is today, barely talks, never listens, angered easily. It is the wolf’s fault," she nearly yelled at me. She walked to the piano, and looked at it as though she would play it, but she didn't. "I've always hated the sound of the piano, It always got on my nerves. No one had played in so long, until you came. You remind him of Imari, you know. You sound like her, you play like her, you act like her, you even look like her. And now, you get all the attention from Javier, just like her. I have tried so hard to please him, but no matter what I do, he just see me as a little pest. But you, he's already in love with you, and he doesn't even know it. Why? Because of who you look like. It's as simple as that," she said, glaring at me.
"I'm sorry, I don't want him to be in love with me. If I could trade you spots I would," I said, surprised at how calm I was.
"Of course you would, because you don't understand what that would mean. You would be with the king of vampires, which would make you the queen. You would have control over everyone but the king. But you don't want that, you think that would be to much work, but once again you have no idea what your thinking. Other people would bring you your food, while you got to sit there and do what ever it is you want. You would not have to lift a finger to do anything. Understand, now? Yes, Of course you do, it's no that hard," Aballa said, as though it was all my fault, like I choose this fate. "Now, please finish your story, tonight, it will be to late tomorrow."
"Well, the first night I met Taylor, I told him everything about my life, never changing the story, but the truth. He listened to me as though I was the only person alive. When I was through, we ended up in the park, on a bench with his jacket on my back. 'Why don't you just leave?' he asked. 'If your unhappy, find a way to be happy.'
"'I have my little brother I have to watch, and if I leave him, I don't know what would happen to him,' I said.
“'I'm sorry. I can't do this,’ I whispered, shrugging of the jacket, trying to leave, but Taylor wouldn't let me. He truly enjoyed being around me. For the first time in my life, someone looked at me as though I was important, as though I'm not just something you can throw around, as though I'm better then just a whore.
"'How much time do we have left?' Taylor asked, knowing, just like me, that if he left, we would never see each other again.
"'It doesn't matter to me, I can't go home tonight,' I whispered.
"' Come to my house, you can stay there for tonight.‘ Looking at his face, I knew I couldn't say no to him, so I just whispered, 'Okay.' As we started down the street to his house, I learned about him. He had an older brother who looked over him as did to my little brother. His mom and dad are doctors, amazing ones to. I learned that he played football, and baseball. He didn't date, because there was no one good enough. I remember thinking I would be no different from the others.
"'You can take a shower if you want. I'll find something for you to wear,' he said , staring in to my eyes. With that, Taylor lead me to the bathroom.
"I toke a short shower, and put the shirt he gave me on. I walked in to the other room, and handed him his jacket with the hundred dollars in the pocket. 'This is my room,' he said looking around at the mess.
"'I like it. It's kind of cozy,' I replied with a smile.
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Well, here goes everything:
No comma needed here.Capitalize your I.
Change that period into a comma.
Change it to something like "If I could trade spots with you I would." It's just a suggestion, 'cause the original way looked funny.
I'm sure you meant it's not that hard.
Start a new paragraph here.
Well, that's all! There might have been more mistakes, but if so, I didn't see them.
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