This is my first go at poetry, so I may be a little rusty. Thank you for your reviews and be sure to read and review my novels. Enjoy.
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Okay, I really liked the story behind this poem.
It's... deep and bold.
It's about the darker stuff. And you captured the feeling quite brilliantly.
But I did notice a few errors. One of them alliepallie has mentioned.
Another one:
But good job overall.
Keep it up!
I really liked it, it's not too long, but it tells the complete story.
Well done.
There were some grammar mistakes though..
It's you're or you are if it fits better in the sentence.
And I think you mean they're and not their.
Still, very well done, and keep up the good work!
this work is okay. my only question is why you throw in the word citizen without any other words to relate to it. I understand what you're saying, but the word citizen just sticks out. Not bad for a poem.
it's goodbut it just needs something....more. i feel like theres something missing from the overall explaination of the three men. develop it a bit more, and it will be very good
its verry good, deep, but needs a longer story , make it gory maybe, or explane how they kill.