Hello, I really liked your poem. The title initially got me hooked and I love to read anything concerning technology. The starting and ending were perfect as well. i really liked the way you have described each scene.
My favourite lines were these:
"A computer screen turns on,says hello, in its lectronified way.
A verteran coming home cries hello, to his daughter on this fine day."
Another thing that I liked was the usage of personification. Example being in these lines:
"My phone screen begins to twirl around, like wind around the trees,
Somewhere in the world, today, trees are blown into the seas."
Overall: a very nice and well- written poem.
- Anshira
Points: 747
Reviews: 103
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