roses are red violets are blue.. death may take its toll far from you

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What can happen when violet finds out She was suppose to die by the grim reaper ?( She calls death) She had a power to know what can happen and when her death is. She would always survive but when a letter Shows up at her house death decides to get revenge and decides to hurt someone She loves. Can She save the person She loves? When there many miles away.

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Very good poem, some grammatical errors like double spaces, random capitals and the fact that is has no structure are pretty much all i could spot. If you would have checked over your work and structured it a little bit more then it would have been a perfect piece. So far it's a great piece but, as i said before, work on structure and grammar - WartyFingleBlaster

P.S sorry if this seems rushed I have a lot of homework to do but i'm procrastinating on this haha.

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Raelyn723
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I like the idea of this! I do have to point out though, that if you write with the grammar that you did here it might be hard for people to understand because you put spaces in weird places and you capitalized random things. If you can fix the little grammar and convention errors then this will be even better! I hope you write this story and post it, it sounds very interesting!
-Raelyn



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