One last chance to let you know how I feel
One last chance to let it be real
One last chance to shoot a smile your way
One last chance to let you know it's okay
One last chance to tell you I love you
One last chance to not lose sight of you
One last chance before the final goodbye
One last chance to not let you die
One last chance to pull you back up
I had one last chance, but I gave that one last chance up
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I like the rhyming
I like it... A nice short song.. ^^ You said it all with just a few words
that's really my only issue with this. Other than that. I completely relate to this poem. I feel like you could expand on it. It seems kind of bland by just saying "one last chance" over and over again.
You could have it be the start of every stanza and in that stanza you could explain it more. Like
One last chance to let it be real
(then say stuff by what you mean on what's "real")
(then say stuff by what you mean on what's "real")
(then say stuff by what you mean on what's "real")
One last chance to shoot a smile your way
(repeat same thing) x4 or however many lines.
Just my thoughts. Good writing though!