Published December 5, 2010
i apologize for the format!
Ive feared my mistakes to face them to look and to listen
Ive sat here alone behind my 2 way mirror
Watching life go on while I sit behind the scenes
Ive been alone as long as I can remember
Watching and waiting
Fearing and tearing
Ive watched it all go from my life
I was afraid of my own mistakes
To make them and be crushed by the problems ive caused
But now when I look ahead all I see is me alone
Behind that 2 way mirror
Alone and forgotten
Like a fossil never unearthed
A face never known
Maybe its time
To start again
To break free
From me
All that I really fear is me
All that’s there to run from
All that I see
All that is me
Is about to change for the better
Ill take my first step
Without my regret
Hoping to live free
I smash the glass
And live
But what did I expect to find?
Streets paved with gold
Without being told
What im expected to be
This isn’t me
This worlds corrupt
So for now I think ill go back
to sitting alone
counting the days
till finally its time
to break free
to a world
Excepting me
So I go and hide
Behind my broken two way mirror
And when its time
Ill break free of this tragic tale
Move on and move forward before I disappear
Its time I set a path for my life to go
To look and to listen to the problems ive caused
And when I break free
For real this time
Ill walk on the broken glass of my mistakes
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Hey there! Great song. I have to agree with hockeyfan87's comments. The grammar is taking away from the song's potential. It's very distracting. But anyway, after you fix those, I think you'll have a pretty nifty song on your hands! XD
Overall? Good, you had a lot of mistakes involving the apostrophe and I fixed those. The errors are in red. Well my edits. I like the song a lot and I think if you were to fix these mistakes you could have yourself a good song. Like I pointed out before when the number is twenty or less you should spell it out you can always spell out numbers less than a hundred but you need to spell out ones less than twenty. Also when you say [color=#FF0000]its as in it is it needs to be IT'S not its. Ok well PM me if you would like me to review more of your work. Lots of love. Jenn[/color]