A girl lost in the forest
She doesn’t know how long it’s been.
Hours, days, months
She runs; she calls but no one answers.
No food, no water
All she knows is she’s alone.
A boy wandering through a meadow
He dreams of never again going home.
He walks; he lies down in the grass.
He doesn’t notice anything
No sun, no birds
All that matters is that he’s alone.
A woman stuck in traffic
She doesn’t know where she’s going
Just moving, just driving
A backseat that’s filled with bags
No letters, no phone
All she feels is that she’s alone.
A/N: I don't normally write poetry but it has been suggested that I seriously give it a try and this is the result of those suggestions. Please, tear this apart. 
I really need help on punctuation and a title.
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Hi, I'm Tigress and I'll be your reviewer for the day.
First, let me say that I really like this, but as always, there is some thing that could be worked on.
The rhythm. I couldn't get a feel for it at times.
Like here. It moves so freely and slow but sometimes you seem to have one to many words. Like here. Just by taking out "that's" I think it flows so much better. (;
Next, is description. You don't really have that much description. I could sometimes imagine myself in the girl or boy's shoes but not always. Try to work more on that.
For example:
You could do much much more with this. As in:
He doesn't notice the colors explode
No sun, only clouds
Yeah, so not the best example, but just thoughts on how to get better description and such.
Overall, I really liked this. I would definetly LOVE to see a revised version of this soon.
Hope that I helped,
Tigress.