Published March 6, 2010
nothing works if it remains in words thus poets live,love only in words..
there is no step taken only words uttered but i am setting the pace...
i am speeding and i can not see any of you....come...ran...
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Hey!! I really loved this!! Nicely done!
Hi,
welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here.
This flows really nicely.
I'd put a comma after "words" and "love". I'd change "step taken" because it's a little stale. I'd change "ran" to run".
I'd also try to bring this outside the poet by using more imagery and referring to the readers.
Hope this helps.
Jas