To everyone who has commented on this so far, thank you so much! To any future comments: There was a part in here in here I took it because it was cliche, "Ashes, ashes, we all fall down," except there's this other part that doesn't make sense anymore without it so- put that back in or do something to the other part?? Oh, and there's definitely one other thing in here I'm gonna change, soon as I can think of something- the knife thru butter thing seems kinda...dunno, but there's a better way to put it I'm sure. Sooo I'll just work on this AND the Mixed Tape tomorrow. Oooh, and a poem that's due for my creative writing class...should be a kickbutt poet by the time I'm done with all this editing lol. Anyways, thanks again to everyone who's commented *hugs*
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