Sometimes, when someone leaves, Its like they sucked away a piece of you from your life, your being. It gets harder than it was because you had this connection with that person. Having your phone with you becomes a useless burden, because all you want to do is talk to them. Going to places where you're bound to see them becomes almost impossible. You have to drag yourself out of your bed every morning and force yourself to be happy in front of them. You find it impossible to breath or talk when they're around, its as if they suck the air out of you by just being there.
I think, every time someone leaves, they take away a part of you which only they could bring out. They take away a part of you, so foreign to yourself, so dear to you. I think, even though we know that we're better off without them, we can't help but want them because, as said, humans have a knack of choosing precisely the things that they can't have. I think, even though we know that they aren't good for us, we love the excitement and adventure they bring in our life and so we're ready to go through hurt and pain for them. Just because we want them and that thrill in our lives, we're okay with hurting.
Even though we could do almost anything to have them be a part of our life, when they say the have to go and ask you to let them, you do. No, you don't do it out of concern or selflessness, or for them, but only for the amount of love you have for them. For the sake of that love, you let them go, because you love them so much that you can see yourself hurting but not them. So, you give up yet another person for something so stupid.
Then, when it actually is the time for you to face them, you're scared and nervous. Not for what they'll say or do, but for how you'll react, what will you say or do. When you finally see them, and their face that used to give you joy at one time, does nothing but boils anger within you, and so, you walk away, you walk away from them, their promises, their explanations, your wasted tears, and lastly, your past, and you swear to never turn back and look at them.
Eventually, when everybody has expected you to stop hurting and gotten over your friendship, you still haven't. You can't seem to 'get over' the conversations, or the 'romantic' acts, or the play fights, or the 'flirting', you can't seem to stop hurting, eventually, over the time, it has and will decrease further, maybe even stop at one time, but all you know is that, that time isn't now. Knowing that it doesn't affect them, you wish it would, and still, you didn't go back, you didn't look back, and you never will. They did what they 'had' to, now its your turn, the game's on you, play well!
-B. ©
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Hello bhoomi5! This is Sylar here for a short review on this lovely review day. Go team Blue Moon even though we're losing by like 4,000 points!
"Its" shouldn't be capitalized.Anways, let's get onto the reviewing. Altogether, I thought this was a beautiful and really interesting little piece. First off, I don't think you should call this an "Article/Essay." It's more of an "Other" type piece.
From a quick look, I found these spelling/grammar errors:
(By the way, any time you write "its" it should be "it's")
"breath" should be "breathe"
Aside from that, I thought this was really well done. When I first glanced at it, I thought it would sound whiny and repetitive, and it really isn't. It's simple and effective, and I applaud you!
Very nice job! Love, Sylar
ThankYou!
And yes, I don't think I did the editing very efficiently.
Wow, that was very engaging. It was so true to my heart that I had to look away for a second before finishing it. That was brilliant, and I'm so glad someone shares my thoughts. It's good to know I'm not alone. I'm also sorry you had to go through that, because it does hurt. Nobody else seems to understand the pain unless they've been through it, and most people never have been through it. So it's a lonely sort of pain. Anyway, there's not much I can say in the negative or to fix.. maybe you could rearrange the first paragraph though. I love all of the words in it, but I think they're in the wrong order. It would be more effective to say how you feel next to them, and how you feel even when they aren't there. you kept looping back between these two ideas, so I would fix that and just put all that contributes to them around together and all the times when they aren't there next, and the times that you miss them last. I loved the fact that in the end, you missed them when they left, so keep that at the end. It makes your ending very impactful on the reader. I love the emotion in this work, and I can clearly feel the hole in your heart, and the painful wound that was left. I think you could also explain what it's like to connect to others now that this has happened to you, Also, I would add more personality to these friends of yours. I know that they don't understand your pain, and they think your over it, but add more. How does each type of personality affect you? The happy people, do they just make you so angry you can't be friends with them? The sad people, do you usually sit silent with them and brood? Do you wonder what it's like to be in their shoes? Do yuo feel selfish when you feel this loneliness? Or are you so lost in the pain you can't even smile sometimes? Do you fall asleep crying, or do you feel so exhausted and weak that you can't even cry? Questions like these are a good place to start. Thanks for the wonderful piece, I really enjoyed it:) I hope you like my advice. You don't have to make these corrections, but if you want to improve your writing, these ideas are here for you. I'm always willing to help, so PM me if you ever want help. Thanks, Cynder out.
Oh my God! I am so glad you know how I feel, and the questions you put towards the end just describe how I feel.
I will work on it and repost it.
ThankYou