They Met.

Hello. I'm here to review your poem.

Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions.

I don't really understand why you chose to bold some sections. I found it pretty distracting from the story. However, you don't really let readers enjoy the story very much because you end it right where it begins. They met. And then what?

The idea is an interesting one. However, the execution needs some work. You add commas wherever you want a dramatic pause. I think it would be better without all the dramatic pauses, though. There's all this extra stuff in this poem that's really distracting from the main story.

The main chunk of the poem is said two times, but is that really necessary? And who is "they?" Why is it bolded? Is it Society? If so, then write society, don't write "they." I think you should ask yourself what the purpose of this poem is before you edit it. What is the point you're trying to get across? Right now, I'm not sure what it is. A hunter and a lion meeting in a zoo? Neither of them can do anything about it. Why isn't the lion in the wild? Why a zoo? Is that the point of it? This poem has left me with more questions than answers.

Try focusing on what happens after they meet instead of before. It will give you better material to work with. Why is a lion and a hunter so destined to meet, anyway? Hunters probably meet lions a lot of the time.

Another thing. Why do you say "girl" when you say "man" in the first section? You need to make this consistent. Either change "man" to "boy," or "girl" to "woman."

Altogether, I think that this idea could be interesting if you focused on a different part of the story. I hope that my thoughts spark yours. Happy writing.

ay, someone's liking their own works. I wonder who that is...

ey b0ss, it's awtbeyders from the ex-Hermione Granger Appreciation Society

Let's get right into the news.

I find love poems ridiculously oversaturated (double positive), but the idea behind this lioness and hunter quite unique. Though if they were to meet, it might be one hell of a mess, wouldn't it?

Anyways, not much complaints. This is actually very good. There is actually a consistent pattern, the boldfacing of letters are interesting and new, and the overall idea of this poem is brilliant.

Hopefully, I'll see you again in the future.

Hi Ryan here to review!
First of all great poem! I love dramatic poems like this. I liked how you have the bolded words throughout the poem. After i finished reading your poem I went back and read only the bolded words. I feel like the bold words describe the poem in it's self. A dangerous girl looking for someone who is also dangerous. A dangerous boy looking for the same thing. Them finally meeting.
My only complaint is that you capitalized the first letter of every line even if it wasn't the beginning of a new sentence. Personally I would not do this, but this could just be your personal style which is totally fine.
Over all great poem!
Keep writing
-Ryan aka ang920