Everybody

Everybody nose
Where it goes
In your clothes
Up your nose

Do you no where it goes?
The stuff in your toes or on your clothes
Or maybe even up your nose
Who nose where it goes?

Weather its up your nose
Or on your clothes
Or even in your toes
You can always take it to go

Do you no what it is?
Maybe you should take a quiz?
Or maybe it is all a fizz?
Who nose what it is?

It can be faulty
Sometimes it taste salty
It can be malty
Its your personality

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banana_baby_16 wrote:Everybody nose Is this supposed to be "knows"?
Where it goes
In your clothes
Up your nose

Do you no where it goes?
The stuff in your toes or on your clothes
Or maybe even up your nose
Who nose where it goes? Again is it supposed to be knows?

Weather its up your nose
Or on your clothes
Or even in your toes
You can always take it to go

Do you no what it is?
Maybe you should take a quiz?
Or maybe it is all a fizz?
Who nose what it is? For the first three stanzas you are rhyming is with "nose, goes, clothes toes" then all of the sudden in this line you switch it up on us. I'm not sure it fits.

It can be faulty
Sometimes it taste salty
It can be malty
Its your personality


It was a cute little poem with a hidden little message at the end, but like I said up above the rhythem seemed a little off. Like you were trying so hard to rhyme that you forgot the poem it's self.

Quirky and mocking rhyme, but light and easy to read. I liked it, but there is not too much I can say about this. It was good.



The best speculative fiction peels your mind and shows you the familiar from a direction you have not looked in before
— Neil Gaiman