Hello! Leya here to leave a quick little review on this wonderful poem! I think the message you tried to get across was powerful, being not enough or feeling like you always mess up. I feel like this is also a super relatable piece, so I applaud you for that as well!
Now, lets get to the content and formatting. I would've liked to see some commas in this piece, but the thing about poetry is that you can really write it however you want. I feel like if you added some commas, the piece would flow much smoother. This is just my personal opinion, though, so take it with a grain of salt!
I really did enjoy the repetitive lines, such as:
always there to make me feel
small
small
small.
and
So I cave in and
hide
hide
hide
These were immensely powerful lines, and drew emphasis to the emotional aspect of this poem! It made me feel like I was inside the narrator's brain, hearing those words echo into the endless void. It was truly smart of you to add this creative idea to the poem.
Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed this read! It had a great ending, and even better beginning, and all the aspects I look for in good poetry was there! I can't wait to read more of your work in the future. <3 Happy Writing!
Points: 123
Reviews: 82
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